between
wet suppleness
clenched secrets fabled folds,
waiting- for my fingers - - my touch
red pearl
Author notes
I thought it would be nice to step into the halflight of convention for this one. I love the theme of the contest.
Thanks again to gingergreentea to the " - " lesson
Written April 8th, 2005
A contest entry
- Cinquain: Take 7 by Ava Noire.
307 points, ended April 13, 2005, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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red pearl
whoa!!!
vajay jay ba ito
this feels like the g spot to me
or i might be wrong
me and my dirty mind hehe
pero hmmmm...
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I'm not a huge fan of cinquains; they've always seemed a trifle artificial to me. But this one is as far from artificial as you can get: very concise, very intense, very erotic. Great write!
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damn! missed a breath!
Did the erotic book of poems provoke your pleasure on to this piece?
Would want that Cinquain to be read to me..lol.. -
This is quite the cinquain...never read an erotic cinquain before....hmmmmmmmm.
Red pearl. interesting.
Thanks for the read and comment on my haiku, amused.
Cheryl
Cheers!
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I love what you have done here. You have managed to follow the restraints of the form and take it to a deeper level and make it all your own. A wonderfully well done Cinquain here. Thanks for your entry.
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an orgasmic piece!hehe.seriously,good choice of words. beautiful.
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