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Take a moment

Take a little moment to pray for him.
He needs you there
Cas noone's there
Cause his life just aint fair!
He's past out on the floor.
Befor he was just beating his fist on his bed room door.
The bottle went up.
His parents were at him agian
Damn if they don't hate him.
So take a little moment...out of your busey life...
To pray for him

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Written April 7th, 2005

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  • -Tainted- LOoVe
    April 16, 2005
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    Hey I commented on this, I must not of sent it or something. But is this about Rob? I think it is, anyways babe always pray for him, even if this is not. Love ya gurlie! Peace!

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    April 7, 2005
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    VERY GOOD

    Very good.
    Whether or not it's true, you express it
    very well.
    Keep up the good writing!

  • Your Ex-girlfriend
    April 7, 2005
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    Um you have managed to show a very good understanding of you subject. Its good but it could be better


  • Whit-08
    April 7, 2005
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    good

    This poem.. is good! i love it!.. good job!!! keep up the good work! Later.
    <3.Whit.<3