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Ghostly Motives

Unidentified shadows fester in the dark
Trails of twilight lead away, concealing their presence.
Movement...the shadows only darken as I pass by.
>Is it a hidden gesture or a trick of your weary eyes?<

You search for me aimlessly, stinking of fear and cheap motives.

Softly...the trees blend into the black sky, their gnarled branches
extensions of the shadows embracing them.
The moon hangs full, blurred by the lingering clouds of the passing storm.

I, myself, am but a blur...
                         a figment of your imagination.

Author notes

I am writing from the perspective of a ghost, in case you didn't know.
Written April 7th, 2005

A contest entry

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  • Dave AL
    April 29, 2005
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    A ghost is a creature that most people choose to see. In here it speaks of that exact note. The form isn't well established though, but the imagery is good. Thanks for joining.

  • Fluent Child
    April 11, 2005
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    Spooky

    I did also like this, No! I wasn't scared! Very invintive in what you chose to present here. Nice write.

    FC

  • My visions
    April 11, 2005
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    " I, myself, am but a blur...
    a figment of your imagination. "
    I quite like this quote...but is it really all in the mind? LOL!

  • Spartacus
    April 11, 2005
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    This sent chills down my spine chills down my spine. Talk about a wonderful ghostly experience. Very creative. Especially love the last line because it totally captures how our own mind is what scares us. Awesome

  • Tumbleweed
    April 9, 2005
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    Very cool, totally original It reminded me of the time I walked home 'under the influence', down a deserted road at midnight *shivers* Very spooky, good luck.


  • Alahmorah
    April 7, 2005
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    Thank you so much, Ann...I've been out today, buying plants for my garden. I got some beautiful yellow lillies that I will probably be writing about soon.
    Love and Blessings, Ashlee


  • April 7, 2005
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    Ashlee, I love writings like this I have never read one from a ghosts perspective, and I love how the ghost descriped the trees (to him or her it was...softly) and embracing shadows... only as seen from the ghosts world... and almost taunting in the end to the real world... Excellent! I loved it! All the best in the contest, I really enjoyed this, Love and blessings, Annie

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