Hello,
Can't you hear my cry,
Or are you too Divine,
into my life you pry.
Pushed, shoved, hated,
I never quite did fit,
your life was gated,
I may as well quit.
Talk to me,
on your own accord,
I worked so hard,
this is my reward?
Shunned away, feared,
this is what brought on my tears,
I don't know why,
I still fight through the years.
Rejection, pain,
I feel overcome me,
you took my heart,
this was your decree.
You are gone,
forever a memory,
I barely knew you,
and yet you are my misery.
Author notes
My aim isn't to win, though it would be great. I found writing this poem helped me vent my feelings.
Written April 7th, 2005
A contest entry
- Darkness lurks... by PiratexxLove.
312 points, ended May 17, 2005, 14 entries
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Comments
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good way to vent your feelings indeed...good questions at hand
"Pushed, shoved, hated,
I never quite did fit,
your life was gated,
I may as well quit.
Talk to me,
on your own accord,
I worked so hard,
this is my reward?"
A reward of that so bitter is...so wrong..yet this poem is very well written...great job and good luck -
"You are gone,
forever a memory,
I barely knew you,
and yet you are my misery." I found this part, just perfect, i loved it!
The concept was intriguing, the feelings well put, and i enjoyed reading it. Great write! -
who died? i'm glad you weren't set on winning, cuz this needs a little bit of tweeking. (lol, i used the word, tweeking, it shall be my word of the day) it's a good poem, but the English format of writing wasn't in use. it was verbs before nouns and such... but it is a good write, i liked it.
4EVER BEIN ME,
WESLEANN -
Wow. I shocked myself. These are my feelings finally poured out!
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