I remember you very clearly
As though I'd seen you yesterday
I remember how much I loved you
As though you never went away
But you have gone away
And we don't talk anymore
So I don't know what you hate
I don't know what you adore
I don't know the color of your hair right now
I don't know its length
I don't know your biggest fear
And I don't know your strength
I don't know who you've become
I don't know where you are
I don't know if you've searched every night
But still have yet to find your star
But I remember who we were
And things we wanted to do
I knew my heart would get broken
But I didn't know it'd be by you
Am I so easy to forget?
I loved you so much
Don't you remember being my shoulder?
I remember being your crutch
I hate thinking about you
Despite how much fun we had
Because you hurt me so much
And I doubt that you feel bad
It took me a few broken hearts
But I finally learned
Each person is a risk
And many don't care if you get burned
Author notes
I've been forgotten a lot and it really hurts. If you have suggestions or positive comments, I'll be totally glad to hear them, but please don't tell me I'm wrong. I know not all people are like the ones I wrote this to, but the people I wrote this to are like the people I wrote this to (haha). Thanks for reading. Take care
Written April 7th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Pain, Without Love. by La Tua Cantante.
425 points, ended April 13, 2007, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lost Love or Friendship by piccola.
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Some people wear out others like they wear out shoes. Throwing the old away, wearing the new and just forgetting until the new ones pinch and then they think, "Oh my god, the old ones were so much more comfortable." lol. Nice concept, nice rhyme. Thank you for entering.
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WOW! what an amazingly beautiful poem! I love it! Really sincere and emotional. By just reading it makes my heart skip. I'm sure it's really hurtful but try not to think about negative things that happened to you, it's hard but eventually you'll feel better by time. Best of luck
and Good job!
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the first two stanzas were a bit rough, *just hard to get in to* but I was amazed by the rest of it. So well thought out and put together. You have a great talent!
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painful. Hurtful.
Wow. So painful and heavy. Just reading this makes my heart ache for you. Not in a nasty way just out of remorse. I almost feel sorry for any who reads this because of how vengeful these words are. Like the sting of a roses' thorn when you gave it to a friend and they didnt know it was there. Its not always the large impressions people have upon us that hurt the most, but the subtle ones that continue to burn us years gone by.... Why focus on the sad memories when you KNOW they are just lessons to make you stronger? Building blocks of hard lessons making you who you are? To face a hard stone faced world with a heart that can forgive and forget and still see the beauty that it has in it. Some say so little beauty but I see so much that a blind eye turns away because they have only focused on the thorns in the rose garden rather than the roses... such a strong emotional piece, I pray your heart is still soft and warming to those you dont really know so that they see roses rather than thorns...
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I know how you feel, I've lost a few friends to them moving far away, and I can't see them at all or often. This is a wonderful poem you have written. Good luck in my contest.
-La Tua
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That's amazing
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It was the summer of 1993. I thought he was a god. All of us thought he was a god when he was in H.S. He hadn't come off of that cloud of his yet when I started to date him five years later. Ten years later I wonder sometimes if that "God" ever thinks about the mere mortal he dated that year.
This poem brings me back to a time when I had more questions than answers. It reminds how thankful I am that those things brought me to where I am now - with someone I love for being a man that makes the "godlike" seem merely like some small consequence I tripped over along the way.
Keep writing like this and I'm going to be lost in nostalgia indefinitely.
Nicely done in conveying your emotions here. It's great to see a little of oneself through the words of another.
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very deep and emotional write. one can feel the tears and the pain. makes you want to hold u as a friend and say all will be ok.
Rose
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great poem!
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Wow! excellent write, I enjoyed it much, especially since something like this happened to me. But I haven't been forgotten, just the way we were together was forgotten (that might be better or that might be worse, I dunno). Hit very close to home, making me enjoy it all the more! Thanks for the deep thoughts!
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Excellent!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I really liked ur poem it was very great u keep writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
Bravo
It's better to have been seen and then forgotten then to never have been known. This was a great write, and even if I thought you were wrong, as a man of honor, I wouldn't tell you in a space that's designed to give praise and to help. Well done and bravo -
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awewsome poem i like it alot -
Very touching & deep (sorry if that sounds ch
I have to say that really got to me in a sad way,i know what you have wrote about,well i feel i do. It hit a few nerves in me because i have a few poems that are wrote around a subject like yours. I really liked it.
Edited on Apr 07, 4:43 because 'missed a space
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