by ~Gregg Rowe~
Mother
Moon and
Father
Sun watch
over me when
I am sleeping --
cradle rocks to
and fro -- Father
Time will slip away if,
not for Mother Nature --
who will watch me mature:
Growing boy -- reach manhood
Living Peter Pan Syndrome, I
swim in drowning dreams and open
tear blood-stained hearts crying yester-
years of hurtful pain that aged me --
Mother Nature guards my maturity,
Father Time ticks precious seconds away.
Father Sun exhausts my days playfully,
Mother Moon kisses me, cradling nightly.
Author notes
This is a poem written in trochaic meters: 1st stanza Trochaic monometer ; 2nd stanza Trochaic dimeter ; 3rd stanza Trochaic trimeter ; 4th stanza Trochiac Tetrameter and 5th stanza Trochiac pentameter .
Written April 6th, 2005
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very beautiful poem. very vivid imagery. well done, thanks for entering and good luck
~Laura~ -
Trochiac meters are meters that are long/short long/short and then the number before it tells how may feet in the line; SO, mono (means one) so the first line will be two syllalbes (one word or two short words) with the first accent being long then short. As each stanza progesses, a foot is added to the lines until we reach the pentamenter line (meaning five feet, ten syllalbes).
Gregg
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I'm just learning about trochaic meters, what a wonderful, brilliant example!!!
Thanks you!
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This is nicely done! I'm unfamiliar with trochaic meters, so I can't comment on how well you did them (though your rhythm sounds wonderful to me!), but your subject is wonderful. I love how you have mother moon/nature and father sun/time & the repetition of mother/father throughout the poem. Excellent work~
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this is good,but what are trochaic meters?
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great!!!
thats awsome great write -
Very sweet write. I liked the flow and rythem. Oddly though I must say the girl in the pic looks like Bjork. LOL. Wonderful job as always.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Very interesting and unique poetry. Much love.
-Anna -
Well done...
Interesting. Unexpected and spontaneous in an organized way that relflects on your background in poetry. -
Extrordinary
Extrodinary truly extrodinary. The Mother and Father will be well pleased with htis work of art. -
Astounding!
You are magic, nothing more, nothing less! -
fantastic
this is fantastic! wonderfully done! you have done this form justice! I really really like this a lot! Truly fantastic!!!
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