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Intersteller Overdrive (Planetfall)

Trans-galactic transference transparent, biological aspects apparent
Corpsicles revived, twittering, scanned, not deviant....
Nutrition and liquids supplied with vervience

...the huge ship warms, prepares for strife
gangling mechanical chains in hangers, come to life

...not just a bistro week-end, not the dreams of the sleepers
militant members awakened first... slap on their patches....
...slaking their thirst

ciphers and shakers determine curved gloomy mist...
methane planet with a promising moon in its midst....

scissors and phallus, and balooning heat shields
penetrates planet to see what's revealed

tumbling sensory buoys and floaters
electronic wings flying some sorties

instrumental electronics will tell
if this is, or not, a living hell

Intersteller Overdrive, Planetfall shows
if this is the planet where we can end all our woes

quiet hearts and minds, us sapients find...
what may be our home or derelection refound

(part 3 follows soon)

Author notes

go back to 'Intersteller Overdrive', and read the first part... this is a rough published first draft of the second part... your opinions are welcome
Written April 6th, 2005

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  • Redstormy gold member
    April 6, 2005
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    Damn good write my friend....nice to see you around again.

    Red