At times this fast-paced world can be
A burden hard to bear.
The daily grind brings out in me
A feeling of despair.
When days like those come to my door
And I can feel the grind
I visit worlds I knew before
Down hallways of my mind.
I plop down in my comfy chair
Lean back and raise my feet.
A comfy pillow waits me there
To make the scene complete.
I close my eyes and settle back
To let my nerves unwind
As mind goes on a one-way track
Through hallways of my mind.
I visit places I had known
From old days way back when,
Recall the seeds that I had sown
And sow them once again.
I think of turns that my life took
By God and Fate designed
View my life as an open book
That dwells within my mind.
Old feelings come alive once more
As my mind takes a look
Of all the choices I explored
And pathways that I took.
The now is gone - the past returns
My thoughts race unconfined
To younger days where passion burns
Still brightly in my mind.
Then, when my mind is void of stress
As thoughts come to an end,
I slip off into nothingness
Where quiet is my friend.
When I awake, I start anew,
With attitude refined.
Thank God for precious times I spend
In hallways of my mind.
Author notes
I critiqued "No Place Like Home" and "Moonburn".
Written April 5th, 2005
A contest entry
- Comfort Zone by truembrace.
375 points, ended April 7, 2005, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Sigh... Mike, I love this poem. I've had tears in my eyes all evening. This makes me smile and I just came to give you a hug. I'm delighted with the hallways of your mind. They are directly connected to the chambers of your heart.
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Thank you, lassy. Since it was your suggestion it's all your fault!!
Thank you, sweet lady..
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Congratulations, Mike! I'm so pleased that you entered and won! klassy
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Congratulations!
Sweet memories of good times can be comforting (depending on one's present situation). Sometimes, remembering good times can be pretty depressing..but..I did enjoy reading your well-written poem!
♥ Maureen
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Such a great escape you've painted for us here with your poem. It seems as though you were in your comfort zone when you were drafting this as the flow seems as though it wrote itself.
As for reliving parts of the past even better than they were the first time - how sweet might that be with just the right thoughts in place...
This was a great entry. I'm glad you took the time to put something together for this. Thanks and best of luck in the judging. Poems like this certainly raise the bar in a competition.
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Thank you, UrLife...I'm very glad you enjoyed it and I thank you for your kind words
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Thank you, bonnie...yep, our hallways are filled with many things, arent they? We just need to be sure we keep the lights on!
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Awesome job! More than one time while reading through this, a huge smile came to my face. As you spoke the words that made me think "yeah, I do that too", I would grin. Technically, wonderful flow, meter and rhyme. An all and all great job!
~Lyrical
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How enchanting Deer. You have talken us down a quieting hallway
of the mind. I have ventured down this hallway with light music filled with dim lights of the past. Smiles have filled my hallway also tears. Once again Sir Balladeer you have written
a winner.
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Awesome!
Totally awesome! This is an amazing piece. I absolutely love it love it love it!! I'm so glad you share your work here because you are just very talented... very gifted. Great job. -
I travel all the time, Kimberly. While people think I may be asleep or just not paying attention, I'm reliving some very good times. Sometimes the remembering is better than the actual occurence!! Thank you for your always kind thoughts, m'lady
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Thank you, Lassy..yes, I feel home is indeed a state of mind and normally my mind is in a state of confusion! But the mind is a powerful tool. I can imagine something happened years ago and it can still give me chills or drive me to tears...how powerful is that?? Very happy to share with you
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As always Mike your words flow smoothly as silk and as softly as satin. I could just picture you there is your comfy chair and your thoughts raced back in time. Beautifuuly said! Hopefully you really did journey back to days that were filled the same sense of peace and tranquility that this piece had. Good luck in the contest!
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Mike, your verses are so smooth! I truly enjoy reading them. The atmosphere in this is so peaceful and almost like meditation as you empty your thoughts of stress. I have always thought that 'home' was a state of mind where peace and well-being prevail. Thank you for sharing the hallways of your mind with us! And a little bit of home. Klassy
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