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A beautiful day

today the sun is shining
warming everything in its path
I lay on the hill
the sun giving me a sun bath

the green grass under me
sways softly in the breeze
the clouds moving lazily
like a ship in the sea

then the dark clouds come
the sky darkens black
the rain falls in buckets
then the blue comes back

Author notes

That is normal Missouri weather for you.  Keeps changing from beautiful to ugly and back in a blink of an eye.
Written April 5th, 2005

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  • illegalfairy
    April 6, 2005
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    yeah...doesn't it suck. grrr i hate Missouri weather. It could be worse though. It is spring time so yeah that's just how it is... You did a great job in the whole descriptions and stuff. Good job.
    ~later~


  • mesmerized by you
    April 5, 2005
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    very very good

    this poem is so cool!!! i can picture it in my head what u are explaining..like w/ nature and stuff..good job