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one step past the gate

i bleed the tears
ive bled before
i yearn for help
i cry for more

bleeding till i'm dead
screaming till i'm deaf
hating this life
cursing this self

help me conquer
the death of night
life comes to an end
full of fright

shadows that
have never come before
come to me now
to haunt me once more

the dead of the night
the love that i hate
the curse i provide
one step past the gate.

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Written April 4th, 2005

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  • allianceofdefiance
    May 10, 2005
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    yummy

    this is really good and I like the rhming scheme. It's really good. Id so applaud thi sbut I dont have enough points!


  • DeadlySoul
    May 5, 2005
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    I like this a lot. It rhymes very well and it's full of emotion I can relate to. Great write and keep it up. Take care
    Crystal


  • deathmare
    April 5, 2005
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    i like the colors and most iof all the poem great job in bringing the old ryme back

  • going-under
    April 5, 2005
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    thanx! im glad you like it!


  • insane1
    April 4, 2005
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    freaken AWESUM!!

    OMG!!!!
    i FREAKEN LUV THIS!!!!
    its so imaginative...and expressive
    and HOLY COW!! i wish i could write thingz like dat!
    this is probably one of the best poemz i eva read...seriously
    wow...WOW
    the rhyming wuznt obvious and i could TOTALLy relate!!
    once again, u got talen!
    well...ttyl
    corazon tu
    -sarah

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