Days turn into weeks
As I wait
For any news
That you are
Alright
You are always in
My thoughts
As I look
Toward
The Sky
I wonder what
You are doing
Where
You are
If
You are
Safe
Then you call~
Your voice so
Strong
And
Clear
And I
Hang
On every
Word as we
Laugh
Cry
Sigh
Then I realize
No matter how
How long
We talk
It’s
Never
Long
Enough
Author notes
My son is currently serving in the United States Military overseas. I never dreamed how hard it would be to wait for a phone call or some kind of news that he is still ok. I am very proud of my son as well as all of the sons and daughters serving in our armed forces.
Come Home Soon...Come Home Safe.
Written April 4th, 2005
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I forgive you; Merry Christmas!
Even though it seems like i dislike you, i have to thank you for raising a son who has gone to serve his country. If he is as he seems from the photo and your writings about him, you can't be all bad. -
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hi lily,
very good exhibition of emotions...ur longing and care for him is very well shown...when u hear ur beloved's voice when he is not with u, then both happiness and sadness doubles...the last stanza is good and very true...
nice write.
Parth. -
Your comment means the world to me. Thank you so very much. I haven't heard from him in a while now, so this is the difficult part...the silence...it is deafening.
Thanks again.
Lily ~* -
I won't be a twit and say I know just how you feel. But I do hear it in your voice. He and the others are in my prayers. LOL~~Suseann
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yes, as decribed in my author's notes...this is for my son. I miss him and he is very homesick. Talked with him yesterday very briefly. Thanks for commenting!
Lily ~* -
A BEAUTIFUL POEM
A very sweet and longing poem for someone who truly means a lot -
Tragic,
Thanks for the kind comment on this very personal piece. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and reply to my work.
Lily ~* -
Very emotional but great job
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william mae,
Thank you so very much for stopping by and reading this very personal and touching tribute to my son. He is shown here with his cousin. I heard from him again just 2 days ago, and although things are heating up where he is, he sounds as if he is doing good. Thanks again for your touching comment.
Lily ~* -
that's a really wonderful poem, and it isn't never long enough when were talking to someone we love. a great write.
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This poem is great and I can tell you're a very talented poet... now for the bad, i must say that i didn't understand and flow with it very well. you don't explain why you and whoever this mystery person is are apart. all you say is you're worrying about him/her and then you can finally talk to him/her and it's all okay. i suggest that maybe you should do just a teeny bit more work on it so that other viewers will be able to follow this nicely done poem better than i did.
all in all it's very well done i can tell this is an emotional poem for you, and that jsut makes it all the more creative and original if it comes from the heart. feel free to take a look at my poetry, and feel even more free to critise any of it - good or bad. because i really respect brutal honesty. and whether it's good critism or not, it'll still affect my work for the better. take care!
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Beautiful. Gothic Cowbow is greatly missed...seeing his picture reminds me just how much.
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This is beautifully written..I dont have children in the services but my daughter married a military man..I see her pain and her tears when he must go away for long periods of time..the sheer pain of worry that they will return to thier loved ones is surely a burden on ones heart..I pray your son will return home safely for he and all the other that serve make it possiable for me to be home with my loved ones ..my heart from one mother to another go out to you.. a very heart felt poem..God bless
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oh Ms. Lily...what a lovely poem...i'm sorry you are left to worry about your son, it's a noble thing he is doing and all who claim freedom can not help but be overwhelmingly greatful to soldiers like your son...you and he shall be in my prayers, peace for you and a safe return for your son...that's a wonderful pic. you've got w/ this one...and i like the form, the way the words go narrow and widen makes it feel like the poem, or rather your words sigh...much love and prayers...and thank you for sharing such an emotional piece with all of us here on the site...
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Yes, my Friend...I can hear its beat from here...
All will be well...Have Faith...& Hope... Wanda
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GOOD
I KNOW THAT U DEDICATE THAT TO SOMEONE SERVING...BUT I ACTUALLY FEEL THAT FOR SOMEONE THAT IS CLOSER TO ME BUT SO FAR AWAY AT THE SAME TIME...I LIKE THE POEM AND THE WAY U SET IT UP... -
ecxellent
this is so emotional. my thouhgts are with you, may he return home safe soon. I could feel the emotions drip from your wrods wonderfuly written! -
it a very emotional poem but i think your diction takes away from it, i looks like your goin for a mid west simplicity, but you just use like normal words to try an express alot, your tone is very tense and strong i just think you could make your diction and lines more powerfull to a reader who doesn't know about your son, you know, peace
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Amen, my Friend... 
Wanda
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Excellent write
I do not know what you are going through but I can imagine. This poem is amazing. I hung on everyword as well. It is very powerful and I hope for the best for you and your son. Take care... Great write! -
I am not a mother but I can understand how you must be feeling about your son.....he is your own blood and so you are obviously worried about him but its okay...don't worry too mcuh...he will be alright.......
Not only the mothers but the fatherds too will be pround of thier son in the army....your poem is very warm and touching...I feel good after reading your poem ...that's because I see the love for your son through this poem.
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I take it, your bf is in the army? and away on duty? anyway I wish that he stay safe for you too and Im glad you can still speak to him although he is currently away, it must be very hard for you, hope you are reunited soon.
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Semper Fidelis
There is no real comment to offer on such a heartfelt and spontaneous poem as this. I am in the process of digging through this file where I threw poems and scraps over the years and as a result have been posting poems from long ago (hence my recurring darkness piece from 1983 - thanks for the comment, btw) and come across so many similar poems, thoughts and emotions captured on paper while they are still so vivid they sting the eyes. This is true poetry, raw and human and brimming over the confines of the page.
We are proud of your service, and your son's too, and the sacrifices you both make every day. You and he are in our thoughts. These truly are the times that separate the givers from the takers. Thanks for letting him defend us - and for sharing these words. -
i just want to personally thankyou for this poem. and, thankyou for your son serving our country. i know it must be very difficult for you. this was a very touching poem, and i pray for your son as well as all the other troops. God bless,
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Wow, so beautiful! It's so hard to be away from our kids and then under these circumstances I can imagine how thrilled you would be to hear from him! I bet when he reads this he will be such a proud son to have a mother who writes from her heart! Great write!
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Lily, I've heard some of Gothic Rider. I can't imagine that waiting to hear from him would be easy, you have every right to be proud. I am proud of those serving in the military as well. Hope you hear from him soon. Take care and may he return home safely.
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