I hear a whisper in the darkness
your soul is calling my name
and I am brought to a new awareness
that nothing again will be the same
As the gentle pounding of your heart
with every beat guides my way
and a peace within it does impart
led straight to you, my brightest day
Your soul dances gently with mine
into the summer breeze of love
something so incredibly divine
you're my smile sent from above
As precious thoughts fill my mind
of my dreams that are coming true
how in your arms poetry's redefined
in the mystical magic of me and you
Author notes
A.
And then you realize your in love ......ahhhhhhhh
Written April 4th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- hope, happiness and love by crying-blood.
300 points, ended April 29, 2005, 25 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything And Everything by Magik Milk Glass.
400 points, ended April 28, 64 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me Happy On My Birthday? :D by Jaffa-.
480 points, ended October 13, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - depressing or love poems. by SiC.
500 points, ended October 16, 75 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Brilliant brilliant brilliant!
I'm not even sure how else i can describe it.
I just loved every single word.
"gentle pounding of your heart
with every beat guides my way"
It made my heart beat faster and i had butterflys in my stomache.
Brilliant and emotional write.
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I really like this it is beautiful.
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Very good
I really like this poem. Nice flow. Easy to read, nice rhyme. I have read several of your poems and have enjoyed everyone of them
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this is fantastic and you could not have picked a better title. Full of all the wonderous feelings in the world, this poem magnifys humanities inner ability to be blissful and loved!
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You write so lovely and with such passion. It's no wonder this won gold. Take care and Have fun. Steve
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Awww this is so sweet!
It is the beauty of love in the flowing imagery of poetry. Truly an awesome write!
I huggles you.
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Not sure about this . .
Good writing as usual with you . . but the lady seems a bit over confident and matter of fact
How long have you had pointed ears ?
albert.
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This is so dreamy and soft.. I could just wrap up in your words..
Stacy
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Flowing like a river with a great deal of sensuality...lol. There's a definite feeling in the rhythm that is reminding the reader of a slow dance
. Beautiful piece and even the background has a dancing quality to it. Glad it caught my eye. 
rose
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awwwww, this is so sweet and heartfelt. it is sucj a good poem, you deserve all of those applauses. the rhyming is perfect and it makes the poem flow nicely. thanks for entering my contest xxx
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Brilliant
Oh my gosh you have so many applause well I think I'm going to just have to add one more this was absolutely brilliant! But all your work is but I absolutely love this one and the title caught my eye right away. Beautifully written I'm so glad I have you to help me with my poetry. You should read my poem called "Love does funny things" I actually think this one at least worth reading lol. I love you!
~Kayla
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i'm amazed that, after all these applause, the extra apostrophe in "arm's" remains. i'm not sure i'll ever be able to calmly expect this.
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Hi Lena,
Since "Mystical Magic" and "RUSH to JUDGEMENT" have been holding down the No.1 and No.2 spots for more than a week, I decided to come check out the "competition", as it were, and have not been disappointed. This is, indeed a marvellous poem you have penned. I would guess someone(maybe the author) is in love.
Thank you so much for visiting Rush to Judgement (my gift to Sharon)and leaving your very kind comments. Now that I see the beauty and talent of your work, it has even more special meaning.
God Bless and s in bunches,
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Beautiful, just beautiful. I am so glad I found this website... So much inspirational talent! Your poem is so deep and mysterious. An excelent one to get alot of meaning out of. If this is about someone that you love, all the best... you are obviously a very deep and caring person.
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I love meaningful love poems, they are awesome. Great job, this was awesome. I would applaud you but it seems as if you have enough applauses already, and I already used mine up on my friends, sorry! This poem really explained the feeling and influences that love can have on people, especially if you know you are with the right person. I apologize for blabbing, but this was a very good poem. Well done and keep up the good writing!
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Uplifting
All I can do is echo the comments before - a truly beautiful write. The imagery and grace within your words carry the reader along with ease. -
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I why now people called Crimson Tears out of the normal for you. THis poem is beatiful showing a perseption of love in a unqiue way I am glad to witness such a large scale of differnt style one of pain and hurt and another about finding someone you love so much. Great job........keep writing -
Impressive
well all i can say is wow. I really really like this poem. i wish i could write like this -
i like this
the colors are really really cool together!!!
i would applaud but im out
always
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Wow that was just amazing, just keep up the really good work!
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Amazing ! simple fabul0us! wow i really like this, even though you have like 80 aplauds already im giving you another!
wel wel wel done!
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loved it soo much.. made me feel happy .. for good and ya very goo sooo full of feeling great job keep it up
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i love the poem. its simple while touching deep imagination and feelings.. i think im getting the imagination part from the backround lol.. good job
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Omg! That was such an awesome, I really loved it.. I can relate to that, I wish I was as good as you .. awesome write.. keep writing..your good!
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AHH!! I soo relate to that poem...me and my ex..Though the only problem now, is that my best friend stole him from me....BITCH!!!
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Wow....such a nice love poem...I think that you do deserve all those claps...Keep Writing!!!
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Beautiful, wistful romantic piece that lightens the heart with its own brand of special magic. Sorry been away so long, but was glad had a chance to stop by and read this. Warms my heart to read pieces like this. Peace rose
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I think it is beautiful and soft. You did a wonderful job.
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this is awesome! i really liked it.
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how could I mind that thanks sweetie Ill stop by and check out some of your work too
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WONDERFUL!
SIMPLY LOVELY! I so enjoyed reading this; -
well i th8t ur poem was fantastic luvd it t bits n stevehubank or wateva his nme is dont take any notice of him so what if u spelt a few words wrong who doesn't were all human.hes just jelousur poem was to amazing that he had to criticise its insecurity lol
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i enjoyed this very much arrrrrr wht beauty and joy the 1st feelings of love thank you lovly poem keep them coming scouseprincess
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Whoaaaaaaa ....Its a nice poem , keep on writing..
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*mouth hangs open*
omigod, that was BEAUTIFUL. breathtaking.
what steveburkart said though, about "strait" - i don't know if you did that on purpose or not but it kinda distracted me out of the imagery. -
sweeto
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really very imaginative
I am stating here and now... your poem was awesome..like major Wow..)) Honestly, I did enjoy the images that your words could create, and as an artist/poet, I saw something like moonlight mist and lovers together, just simply being, and holding hands as if I were standing behind them... I may use your poem to paint that picture..)) thanks -
Let me first preface my remarks by noting that I am a noticeably better critic than poet, so I hope that my criticism will be taken in the spirit in which it is intended - an offering of a viewpoint, intended to help the author, and an invitation to criticize my few poems.
I was impressed with the first 3 opening lines, and the concept conveyed in the first stanza, though line 4 comes out a little stilted. Beautiful poetry makes the rhymes and rythms seem natural. Line three in stanza two is similarly strained or at least archaic in tone ("and a peace within it does impart) and the next line contains what appears to be a typo - the correctly spelled word "strait" (as in straits of Gibralter) used in the place of "straight" to the author's heart.
I love the alliteration, rythm and rhme of the last stanza, particularly "in the mystical magic of me and you".
So, all the above said: a very nice poem!
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This the second piece you wrote thatI've read and is amazing! I hope you don't mind if I put a bookmark on this and you on my favorites
Gothic Angel
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amazing!
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Perfection
Failte
Wow, I loved the poem, wonderfully worded and great imaginary. I would love now to read some more of your writes, thanks for posting it so that we could read it! ^^ You have earned an applause from me!
Blessed be
Slainte
Slan
Morgana
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simply amazing,i really enjoyed it
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this is a great poem. you worded it very well and you used the best words at the best times. i would love to read more of your poems and good job and keep on writing. you should also check out some of my poems. think about it ...............................
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catches the hug whoo hoo I sure do love hugs
thanks for the kind and wonderful comments on my work hun.
huggles
~Lena
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This is quite a little masterpiece you have created here Lena .. oozes with emotion and I hate to say this again because I just said it on the last poem of yours that I commented on, but it is beautiful .. the words lift from the page like a dreamy lullaby .. perfection hun .. and I adore the background .. I can see why it has been applauded so many times .. here is another one catch
~Aimee
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The beauty of it all. This was quite an awe inspiring poem. I hope to read more from you some time. I hope you enjoy your high position
I was there once, if you care to read mine. Have a great time with writing, I know I do.
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YOUR POEMS ARE AWESOME!!!!!!!! I am looking forward to look more of your poems...you really deserve to me be the most applauded! (since you are a great poet and can u please comment mine....only if u want to , i appreciate it...it mightnot be good though...)
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That is an awsome poem. I was realy into it.Keep it up!!!!
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This poem has two qualities i like honesty and passion. Very good
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great
this poem is awesome its light hearted but at the same time deep. I hope you write many others this sucessful
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Wow this piece is good, I agree, you got a gitf, and you know how to use it!!!
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A little klunky, but I liked it.
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thank you!
I like the play in the last stanza, referencing the redefinition of poetry, while the poem itself is a very conventional form.
this poem reminds me of a few fragments and variations I found amongst the personal collection of my grandfather, an amateur poet. from the dates in the notebook, I figure they were from the time he was courting my grandmother and might be from a series of love poems he included with his letters. those pieces too evoked images the the supenatural affects of love bringing a new understanding or enlightenment, though your poem is more positive in the outcome. -
this is so beautiful. each word in each line paints a beautiful picture of love. your right it feels so magical when you are in love and you have portrayed that feeling so well. this poem shows oyu have such talent with words. very very well done *window*
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this was so sweet. i mean really it is. idk what else i can possibly say that hasn't been said b4. great job!
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Excellent
wow.. this is such a beautiful poem.. is awsome.. i loved it.. and the image is really cool too.. great work! -
lovely
What a beautiful poem. The way you describe love is so majestic. The flow is great too. In such a short piece you capture a moment with such detail. Well done -
prettyful
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this poem is so good! Amazing job!!
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Brilliance TRUE GOLD I love you heart and sou
~My Beloved Purple Sky~ your lyrical song is magical~
I hope I can listen to this on the airwaves soon
Everybody would enjoy your magical song of love’s true bloom
I hope you have music to accompany this heavenly song of love
Surely, you know this is heaven sent from the grace up above
It reminds me of that famous song on the radio
"God could be any one of us"
"you're my smile sent from above"
Have my heartstrings dance in your love
Brilliance True Gold from and eternal heart of heavenly Gold.
Absolutely stunning and beautiful oh please i beseech of you Purple Sky
Where in the eternal heavens did you get this image with the neon blue pearls?
Oh would there be the slightest chance in the eternal heavens you can share this with me please please please I’m down upon my knees asking praying tenderly
I'm not even taking the slightest chance on this image here is my e-mail address in black and white for you as i wish you a peaceful night in sweet dreams and joyful musical themes. ~Namaste Blessed Be, Sharron~ sharoncorr2@sbcglobal.net
Rush, and please hurry-scurry, sending this heavenly image to me and we can trade my silver for your neon blue, as we sing in tune to the midnight sky and the waxwing moon.
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Absolutley beautiful, gives me hope for new days to come with my husband and i...trying to get that feelign back. Good job. I love it
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awwwww!! really good! keep writing!
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I have to say, you chose one of my favorite rhyme schemes.
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Wow I love how you desribed the way love jumps you. It is true the way it is, but I don't believe I've ever been truly in love. I wouldn't know how it feels, but my best friend does and she tells me all about it. She's on AP as well, ever heard of lovelyroses? She's been there..anyway great poem!!
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Wow. I love this poem. You are a good writtier. Great job
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Stunning piece of how one day you just know in your heart you are loved...and love also.
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So Sweet!!
Aww!! This is soooo sweet!! It's great to know that you're in love. The feeling is over-powering.
Keep up the good work and don't forget to tell the ones you love that you love them!!
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I likey
Wow... this was beautiful, really great write. The flow is amazing and the rhyme feels natural. Really great write.... I'm repeating myself lol but still it's lovely. Very nice
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my word this is amazing...so wonderfully written in stardust...dreamy write...good luck with the contest.
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well like you I was not looking geesh broke up with most before I could fall in love with them lol. but you know love when it happens it just kind of sneaks up on ya and bites the crap out of ya and leaves its mark on your heart. thanks for reading and for the lovely coment
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I have been in love and do hope to love again! This poem reminds me of many of my life experiences. It is written with a great flare, and I can easily see why it is the most popular poem here at allpoetry. Congratulations on a job very well presented. I love the feelings I am left with after reading this, although I am singl,e and not really looking at this time. LOL
Lisa
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Lovely!
oooooooooouuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu you are in love, love, love..... you got a boyfriend, and you love him, ouuuuuuuu....
You are so adorable and deserve all the love, and not to mention you are a cutie.......
Much love sweetness!
-Timothy The Poetic Weaver
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Oh girl this is wonderful! It was such a great read. You are awesome.
Your wench sister
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Amazing
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Wow, what an excellent, amazing, spectacular poem this was. I loved reading it, it deserves an applaud. Hehe
Take Care,
Jasmine
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well perhapes if you let me know what needs to be fixed it might be more of a helpfull critique. thank you for reading
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You did an excellent job on this poem. It is a pleasure to read. Well done
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Good, but check spelling and grammar. It makes it sound more professional and I'd take it more seriously.
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Amazing
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this is a really good poem
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Extremly and amazingly beautiful! Love.. *sigh* Its happy moments are the best....Your words are warm and so passionate, one couldn't help but smile at the emotions you portray here so gently and so sweetly.. Marvelous work indeed.
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Such a beautiful poem. It's strength and admiration can be clearly felt in each line. The poem opening line set the tone for this very beautiful poem. It was and is still captivating. Your imagery paints such a wonderful picture within each line of this masterpiece. Outstanding Writting. I look forward to your next poem.
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excellent poem
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Over all this poem spoke to me I like it alot
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wow, that was really great, really strongly put into words. my favorite lines is the opening sentences, "I hear a whisper in the darkness, your soul is calling my name" its just the idea how you can hear anything in the darkness even the quietest whisper, but its really his soul not a voice which you cant actually hear... its just great. awesome...yeh,wooo
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Excellent
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Very cool. The emotion is very obvious but its also very ordered. Flows really well.
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very etherial. i only wish it were longer
*hopes for a part two*
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What a lovely write Well done
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Simply wonderful!
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yes I have not felt this way in awhile and it feels really good I love having someone always tell me how beautiful I am and how much he loves and adores me. Just took me awhile to except he really loved me and be sure I loved him back..those words have not in that way crossed my lips for awhile. thanks hun
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This a beautiful poem Hun and I love the way you describe everything here. Being in love is the best feeling in the world.
♥ Kimberly
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