The day you died
I laughed until I cried
So overwhelmed with joy
I was nothing but your toy
You played with my emotions
Made me how you wanted
Never cared how I felt
You never made my heart melt
Except that very first day
When "Hi" was the only thing we could say
Day by day it got worse
Slowly becoming our curse
Our emotions became our plague
Romance in us was always vague
Nothing was there most times
Knocking against each other like wind-chimes
I never got a thing
Not even someone to cling
Abandoned every mile
You never made me smile
Endeavoring to always put me down
Forcing upon my face a permanent frown
Full of anger and despair
A fury that glowed red would stare
Just to make you as low as you are
You took false power way too far
Which is exactly the reason why
The day you died, I laughed, didn't even think to cry
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Written April 4th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- : Hope Becomes Reality : by -a7x-.
317 points, ended April 13, 2005, 5 entries
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Wow...
How emotional,how strong... -
p.p.s im going to meet trent
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awesome honnesty
i have been in a situ where someone made me like that and they often threatended suicide but they never do i feel guilty becuase every time he didnt do it i was dissapointed -
trenttastic
i love trent also he is a god no debate. love the poem as i know a certain person who i would feel like that about cool
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Hmmm... yeah some people come into your life and leave their stamp and they are a personal part of who you are... and other people are simply dirty little vessels that you can use to reach a new part of your life, a new independent you. Those people are usually ex-boyfriends.
I would say that this is definately about an ex-boyfriend.
As far a poem structure the 5th and 6th lines don't seem to rhyme as the others do. Otherwise it seems pretty sound. -
Wow! (mouth wide opened) This is really sad. This is very well written.To me there seems to be a lot of anger about what he did and satisfaction now that he's gone. R u happy? Because I'm happy for you if you are. I really like this poem. Good job. Keep up the good work.
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wow how sad ( ; _ ; )
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haha, I love the last line!!! Anyways, I am glad that you are happy now. Nice write and good luck!
-CoLe
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it is about my ex and no i dont have feelings for him any more...he committed suicide over three years ago and since then i have found true happiness with the person i have now.
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Hmmm... sad piece, I got mixed feeling from this... it seems like your hurt by them, yet it feels like maybe you still have some feelings for them... hmm... I dunno... good poem though. I'm just curious, is this about your boyfriend now... or like an ex or something?
sonya -
this is a good piece...very ironic and very well written...i like the i laugh untill i cried bit..altho it is a lil sad..the story but i can understand the emotions! well done..good write...keep it up
#kady
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