Once upon a time
I touched the rainbow with my heart
I found a moonlight inside my soul
I warmed my love with the Sun.
Now, I am the rainbow
I am the moonlight
I am the Sun heat.
You can try to touch the rainbow
You can try to catch the Moon
You can try to touch the Sun
But you will never try to understand me.
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GT: allpoetry.com/Contest/1217450
Written April 4th, 2005
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Yes, sometimes we must to take some look to back, but not too much.
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Great job
Great job on this piece too! I am so behind on my reviewing it will take me a month to catch up! I enjoyed this one, always something new. -
I agree with you that we must be moore open, but sometimes when somebody used us just because our open soul, then we have to close our shell.
I wish I could have a more time for reading a poetry. Anyhow, I will be back to your site. It worth a time.
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heartfelt words, expresses much in this piece, sometimes we have ot open ourselves more for people to understand us, if we want to, thankyou for reading and your comments in confessions of a massage therapist, i appreciate it alot
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Good
Not one of my favourites, again I have seen you do better with words, but still well written and its messga eof hope is strong and helps people connect to it.
James
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I sooo liked this when I read it the first time, the simplicity really touched me, wonderful musings! and a BIG Congratulations on your GOLD!! whoooohooo the first of many more!
and many blessings my friend, Sandi
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Sonja my new friend....
The beauty and truth of these words are universal to any human soul. Depth of the ocean in so few words. You deserved the gold my friend. Bravo and congratulations on a fantastic write and win.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
Billie Jean -
Thank you very much for your choice! This is my very first trophy, and I appreciate it very much. Thanks to everybody who makes a coment on this poem and congratulation to the other winners.
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i absolutely adored your poem...great job and i thought that you deserved the winning trophy and points. great job. keep writing your awesome!!!
Princess Jasmine -
Thanks everybody for a very nice words!
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i love it very well done -Jessica
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Wow. There is so much meaning to this poem with so few words. I love the last stanza in general. I have felt this way many times myself. Great write.
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wow, this is so beautiful. I love it, its hard to describe but i love it.
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so much truth in it.. I think that sometimes it's even difficult to understand yourself, so how can somebody else understand us better then?..Frankly speaking - never.. anybody..
very good short poem Sonja; it touches pretty important issue of understanding other people and day-to-day relations with others. I like it very much
you deserve a hug
btw, in the first stanza, shouldn't it be "once upon a time"
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I agree with you. This life could be very complicated sometimes. Or, we are here to make it comlicated?
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I have found that my husband......of 23 years, doesn't understand me completely. The thing that he does do, is TRY to understand. He tries very very hard. So, I guess that is where I differ with you. I think some men try very hard to understand. On the other hand....sometimes I don't understand myself, so..how can I expect him to understand me?
Cheryl
Cheers!!
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Oh my, that was to much laud for me. Thank you
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Wow, this is so beautiful and well written Keep writing, this was a lovely poem which I liked a lot
All the best,
Pozo
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This is beautiful Sonja, and so captures the phrase "Do we ever know a woman's mind?" hehehe great job!
and blessings, Sandi
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well done
I like that. I think that voices how a lot of women feel. At least I know I feel pretty much the same. You just can't try to understand me... way too complicated. I love the use of the rainbow, sun and moon to compare yourself to. -
Grateful
Thank you Mina. I am just trying to be a painter with words.
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Aaaaaw.... this is so heartfelt poem... I loved the way you plyed with the words and have made them so effective that they've touched the readers' hearts... beautiful poem... well done and keep it up...
mina -
This is a very nice write...I enjoyed the fact that everything you compared to WAS unreachable....sometimes we don't want to be reached by someone...and theres a certain part of each one of us that will never be reached...we don't want it to be -Amy
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Oh, you are not a Sun heat for somebody? Hm...I have to think about. Anyhow, thank you for your comment.
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A great poem, but I found that some of the lines jusr didn't make sense such as "I am the Sun heat." But I love the concept for the poem. Keep your pen going!
-Meg
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Well, true Eddy...We could be very complicated some time, but what to do? Sometimes we just nead few minutes of peace and love with no words. It is much better when somebody can show you real love with his behavior in many of little things...Then we are not going to be complicated.
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Thank you very much. I am glad that you like my this poem so much!
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Thank you for your opinion, I appreciate it very much. I agree that some other title probably could be better, but now I do not have a "right" to change it because it was published several time at different places. .)
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Trying to grasp a women's mind is like grasping at light rays shining in thru the window. You can see them, they can touch
your skin and feel their warmth, but when you try to grab them
to own, your hand just passes through. So better to just hold out your hand and let her/it settle there...
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Nice poem. Sad but well written. It kinda trips a little but it always sounds different when you read it to yourself then when others read it.
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A very sweet but sad poem, it's a bad thing if people don't understand you, but you know there are people who want to,I think you will find here at AP there are a lot of people in the same situation and they too need a good friend,just say Hi, and you will find so many friends you won't know what to do with them all, all the best, a new friend, hugs Di
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Bee-yew-tee-ful!!!!
Bee-yew-tee-ful!!!! Made me smile and think at the same time. Brilliant poem - that's why you get an applause. Only thing: for me *personally* the title doesn't really fit... maybe "Understand!" or something similar would be better? I don't know, just thought I'd add my two bits. -
could even be a search....more like soul searching...was a touching piece
slippery write indeed..lead my mind to ponder so much in so few words
Brilliant
Peace
Muddy -
Truth. Old painful truth. The rainbow is the other words for unreachable wishes when we just want to be with somebody who will see our soul, not only our face or legs, or...something...
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i undertand your poem because people always think they can understand you but it's as impossible as 'touching the rainbow'
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Gosh this is so true....many people try to "touch" or "reach" for things that are out of our reach...but were too "stupid"(for lack of better words...to reach for things we can touch or understand easily. Great write -Amy
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