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A Masterpiece

Your precious love like a delicate brush
paints the empty, barren canvas of my heart
With glorious colors of magnificent beauty
Filling every part bringing it to life again

Gently stroking and tenderly creating
A world unlike any other ever known
Where the heavens tremble and move
And fiery passion like Galaxies collide

Satisfied you sit in awe at the beauty
Seen as lovely perfection in your eyes
Created with your heart and loving touch
In your arms you now hold a masterpiece

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Written April 3rd, 2005

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  • Grateful
    October 7
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    wonderful poem with a grate staring line..i enjoyed this poem...all the best..


  • bonjourbunnie
    April 24

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    The imagery is astonishing! I love the path that this piece holds and carries me down, though I feel that the ending lacks the strength of the rest.

    I especially love the last line of the second stanza. The words just flow so perfectly and I love the mental picture that it creates.

    Thank you for entering.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    April 18, 2007

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    Lovely!

    You created a beautiful piece that flows wonderfully, as always I enjoy reading your heart of love! Thanks sis for sharing your sweet soul. Much love, bro Timothy


  • illusions
    April 9, 2005
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    the metaphor of this piece is lovely, and you do a wonderful job carrying it through the entire poem. to me, this piece is full of hope. well done! best of luck in the contest!

    illusions


  • Puppydog gold member
    April 9, 2005
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    A BEAUTIFUL AND TOUCHING POEM

    You do have to carry beauty inside of you and your heart before you can see it in someone else. A very beautiful poem


  • antique
    April 7, 2005
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    Brilliant!!

    wow Lena .. your words are filled with beauty .. this is absolutely enchanting and well, beautiful .. I will most definitely be reading more of your work hun, you're an extremely talented poet .. keep the ink flowing

    ~Aimee

  • bassclarinetbuddy92
    April 4, 2005
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    Wonderful; touching.

    I really enjoyed reading this poem. You go into like another world, just describing your love. I liked the descriptive adjectives and the vivid nouns that you use to describe this person over whom your pining. It's very touching and nice to read, and definitely keep at it!


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    April 4, 2005
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    This piece is dearly ethereal, touching and descriptive. It has been a very long time since the last interval where I felt like I could create masterpieces in the genre of love, and until I fall in love again (and find it to be true), I'm not sure I'll ever be able to pick it back up again. This is so lovely, though. I am glad to have seen it as it's a noteworthy masterpiece (for lack of a better word)

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • MoonHelixEpiphany
    April 4, 2005
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    Phew!!! I want to hold a masterpiece
    Hey this was good, the metaphor extension works well and the reader can keep up with it
    Take care,
    Buki


  • dame de la riviere
    April 4, 2005
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    oh how very lovely...what a wonderful idea and message...so very warm and romantic...brilliant write...


  • April 3, 2005
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    This is beautiful sweetie, it's how I feel love, as a canvas... my artistic mind in love, is always inspired by by the brush and the feel.... but I won't go on, lol... it brings to mind a write, thank you sweet one for sharing another exquiste love write, very beautiful, Much love and hugs, Annie > ,
    t'

  • animepoetess
    April 3, 2005
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    I love the combination of art and poetry, as they are my two favorite things...Very beautifully done, Lena!

    --Animaechick


  • poeticpieces
    April 3, 2005
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    I love how you express yourself in this piece and show how you care for the person, and how they meet your wonderous needs, and how the beauty brings your life out again, that was a great line, I enjoyed this poem alot and good job showing your love in this poem and letting your heart write for you, good luck in the contest and keep up the great work, thanks for sharing, laters!~Little tim


  • Airborne Ed silver member
    April 3, 2005
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    The colours that pain your canvas with such beauty would launch so many to a heavenly place. Your poem is as special as an angel coming from teh heavens to fill anyone who reads your poetry with something so vrey special. You once again written with the beauty of your heart. Its always a pleasure to read something so very special and beautiful.

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