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Untouched




I'm looking for silent
Perfection,
But I can't find a perfect
Silence;
Not marred by the lines
of
an artist.
And a pure white page
Just screams
To be written on,
But once you do, it's
Ruined.
Disturbing fresh snow
Means it will
Never
Be perfect again.


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My I-stayed-up-until-six-thirty-this-morning-and-all-I-got-was-this-lousy-poem poem.
Written April 3rd, 2005

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  • Watuwant silver member
    May 25, 2005
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    Another good one! lol, the desire to be perfect being ruined once we attempt to put the perfection down on paper. What a conundrum for us writers...
    peace
    doug


  • L-Train
    May 8, 2005
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    another good one... I like how this one flows, structurally built different from most poems, giving an exotic look and a deeper meaning. I should start attempting more poetry like this, but I'm nowhere near that good. I got alotta paper too, but no snow.


  • Proxy
    April 23, 2005
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    Thanks, my lovely Coryboo, good to hear from you You got my point exactly.


  • Your Messiah
    April 23, 2005
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    Hehehe, I feel like that all the time. I never want to walk in fresh snow. I never want to wrinkle new paper. I look up at the sky when it's completely blue and wonder what it would look like with a few clouds... but it's so rare to get a perfectly clear sky. Rambling. (I'm not trying to get point, just trying to emphasize) Anyway, beautiful write mummyboo


  • thisisnotrevolution
    April 20, 2005
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    wow! i love this


  • Lactar Wolfgang
    April 19, 2005
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    I like this peice it was thought proviking. I like it I will keep reading more of yours I like your style so far.

  • Whisper
    April 15, 2005
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    Perhaps that which you seek lies right before your eyes? "Perfect" is merely subjective perception, for everything, everyone, any and all, are ALL perfect in their uniqueness... "ruined" or "soiled" by one person's standard may be "perfect" by another's...

    Your piece was indeed well written, and indeed very deep in thought and theory....I enjoyed this one....


  • Untill It Sleeps
    April 10, 2005
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    only onother awsome kick A write proxy
    rock on
    -pippy--


  • April 8, 2005
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    nice

    i really like it..it a w e s o m e ! ! !



    always
    kay


  • Anathematized
    April 5, 2005
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    Damn was the only word that came to mind when I read this, so deep in so little words. Very well completed and how true were the sentiments. Nice.


  • lithium
    April 3, 2005
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    i've never read anything bad from you amy...this was just great, and so true... u amaze me with every write, ur mind is deep inside the poetic monster, u understand everything so much
    basically, ur wise
    and a great poet
    greatly done
    ~~lovelith~~

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