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Phallic Representative

Laying prayed sideways
Therapy? Question,

one way up down turn around
break the cycle
caught momentarily uneven
Fuck the prole
break the hole.

Bite her neck and stab her heart
smile, rod looms unholy overhead.
Turn around.

Author notes

Fuck the prole
break the hole.
Written April 3rd, 2005

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  • HistoricJ
    January 7, 2006
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    Definatly diffrent...but I like poems that can say a lot with very few words. I liked the idea behind this it rocked. Good job, keep it up!

    ~*~May creativity always flow from your pen~*~

    Belle


  • barutha
    April 3, 2005
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    quite alright, nonsense + nonsense = sense?


  • Reframing-Quill
    April 3, 2005
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    Great write, because "it's a challenging and creative muse;" one for which all of us has felt concerned "in regards to the working class-" scenario... Thanks for sharing-!

  • thedoobster
    April 3, 2005
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    hey those poems u wrote that cross and that have been slated, great stuff.

  • tutaboy
    April 3, 2005
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    very sexy this one,i think ive fallen for you,i hope u are girl otherwise i look like a tit


  • DonnasGuy
    April 3, 2005
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    good write here, the place you addaed the swearing really seems just right, its perfect infact.

    keep it up and keep the writes coming

    all the best

    ~Michael~


  • April 3, 2005
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    interesting... I like the way this paintec an interesting picture... heh, imagine the image to go with heh.

    Nice

    L.S

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