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When im with u

when i am with u, im free
im careless and my heart skips a beat
when i see u my skin tangle gives me shivers up and down my back
and when u kiss me it gave me smile
when u said i love you
even through my life was spining out control being with u i was ok
when i was in  your arms i knew i was safe
when u said it must end not only break my heart forever will it be scarred

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Written April 2nd, 2005

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  • September 6, 2005
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    Excellente

    I like this, gives a sense of purpose for those (like me ) who seem to be spinning out of control, I like it