Not an eye was dry.
We walked about the school,
Dragging our feet,
Heads fallen in quiet sobs.
The corridors pounded with silence,
A harmonica was drawn from a pocket,
"Piano Man" was sounded down the hall.
Arms wrapped tight around friends,
Consoling words of acquaintances,
Teachers hiding their tears.
Empty souls
In crowded halls
And so
Another
Tear
Falls
Be with us now.
Author notes
Rest in Peace Mr. Lafferty, we miss you already.
We will find you a cure.
Written April 2nd, 2005
A contest entry
- Young poets needed! by squirrelmick.
315 points, ended April 7, 2005, 28 entries
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Thank you all for your beautiful comments, I will comment on your writing as soon as I can.
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This was a wonderfully written piece of work. Each line was so filled with emotion and the form of the poem and how it looks upon the screen: simply beautiful. I too, am sorry for your loss.
Miseria. -
Brilliant
That was a very... intriguing way of writing... I'm not really familiar with the style you're using here. I'm very sorry for your loss... it's horrible to realize just how much a person means to you by having them taken away. -
I have tears in my eyes-you done good.
wow. that's...really powerful. i take he died of cancer? My mom works in the cancer registry department of a local hospital, and we do the Relay for Life every year, to help fundraise that cure for cancer. It's a really great poem, and i'm really sorry for your loss. -
oh well, this is awesome I liked the poem very much, it was so moving and emotional. This is an exceptional piece. I do however, pay my condolences for your loss, the way you write shows this person made a difference to the lives he or she knew.
-Skyelle -
I'm really sorry, I experienced death of a friend before, it sucks. I know exactly how you feel. Very good poem.
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Thank you all, that is very kind for you to say.
Rockstarangel7, the cure is referring to cancer, which he died of on March 31, 2005. -
thats beautiful. i really really really love that, and im bery sure that the person you wrote this for is very very proud.
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You're a sweetie! Great thing to write to someone...your hearts golden...
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I love the emotion and imagery in the poem, but I think the cleverest thing you did was the physical shape of the poem. A teardrop is a very powerful thing... I think the person would love this poem.
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I'm not sure what the 'cure' is, but this was a beautiful tribute to your friend. I'm sorry you and everyone else had to experience such a loss. Sounds like everyone loved him and I'm sure he loved you!
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That was a really good sad poem. I'm sorry for your loss and I'm 1000 percent sure the person you wrote this for will be proud.
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