What will you do with me,
But chase me through the night
Over and over again mother?
Have I not killed for you?
The children, and their dreams
The servants and their loyalty
I cannot and will not begin to
Explain to these stars and trees
These stagnant ponds & poison weeds
How we meet, or work together
All I know is that I am your
Son, lover, and father
Sharing magic and bed with
Wolves and monsters; You bid
Me: Return with song and nightshade
Teach me to charge talismans
How to perfectly love a woman
Grow gods for children
Turn blood into hot copper
And eat the heart of wild stag.
Then abandon me without a word
As sure as daybreak.
Author notes
Immortal Athena by Stinger bee
Persephone by Pleiadia
Hecate is my mother bone.
may this appease you, o mighty goddess.
Written April 1st, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Onyx Fire, Diamonds Glitters by Jade Darklinmoon.
300 points, ended July 11, 2005, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Good work, Jeremi.
becky -
Anytime Pamela, thanks for having me.
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I saw through the darkness..read the myth & found truth..
You've created one very vivid,pain-filled piece..disturbingly so (to me)
Wonderfully crafted
Thank you for entering the contest
~Pamela -
Sweet write
This is very vivid and lovely. I felt as if I were hiding in the shadows invading your privatcy. This is such a sweet write full of emotions. Thank you for entering and good luck. Hugs~ Cuddles -
This is a great write, always thought I was born in the wrong century. Still do. Thanks for taking me to a far way land, a wonderful read much enjoyed!
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Yeah, so did I, living it.
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You know I really enjoyed this Horus.. Take Care, Catressa
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My nudity is besmirching.
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You know you rock but maybe I'll just remind you...
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G olden
Awesum writing,,, conveys a lot of the uncertainty and yet homage that I feel when I read the histories of the GnG in the greek mythos... -
This is a beautiful,thoughtful write....the images are very vivid & true. Thank you for sharing this.
Deena
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Excellent imagery friend. Normally when I think of Greek Mythology, I get a picture of marble and grey and the colluseum and silver swords... But here man... You took me to a wooded area and a yellow moon. Loved the flow. Easy read.
Write on.
DEZ -
I have read this a few tims and each time another line jumps out at me. This is well written, flows nicely, and sounds awesome read outloud.
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Excellent
Diplomatically done. I enjoyed this write. Very pleasantly surprised on the angle you wrote of this Goddess. Your play with the words you have chosen defined more with less. This flowed perfectly. Definitely a high quality & caliber write. Good luch on your entry
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This is just plain good. I enjoyed the emotions and feelings that outpoured from this write.
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Well horus8 I would have expected no less word-art than this from you. Ah Hecate, a contentious bone indeed. The goddess of the crossroads with three heads, all snarling as it seems you have penned. It always amazes me how children are so forgiving, but let a child wrong a parent and oh the hell that must be paid. You have captured so much here my friend. Your title speaks for the poem, the hunt is over you have written with the "highest" quality. Good luck in the contest.
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Good! Very very good!
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You have really set the bar high with this write.The flow, tone, and the tale all add up to a very good write.Best of luck with this intimadating write.
Peace,Rob -
Wonderous words, arranged to form such a work of art. Only if I could do this good. Maybe then I'd have a chance. Good luck in this contest.
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okay yeah, good write, and my chances are definitely slim to none. but, a try is a try and that's all i can do! good write.
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too shay!
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It's amazing in the way that you have made us see so much in so few lines... I sat and read it a couple of times, and each time it seemed to flow better in my head... Definitely an amazing portrayal.
Shari -
Sweet
I can't help but think that you may have meant Artemis aka Diana Goddess of the moon as most of this just fits her to a T
Especially the last two lines they seem to represent the moons setting/break of dawn.
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Thanks so much for sharing this with us I had to let you know that first, next thing is ~This poem was just Wow that's all I can really say about this piece. Keep up the good work and never stop penning
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I love the flow, it just seems to roll off the tongue a little easier than most poems do now adays. You presented Hectate fashionably and quite well! Keep writing, and good luck in contest
~dani~ -
I think this is very well-written and I appreciate the perspective from which it is written. Great job!
Lorena -
I love the amount of emotion and love this piece expresses to this certain Goddes!
Very nicely portrayed.
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I was intrigued by the title, but I don't understand the peom. It fun to read, but I don't know why. I think I like it.
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This has great wording, I loved it!
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I am the walrus coo coo ca choo.
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Amazing
This poem is both narritive and lyrical.You ARE a great poet and this poem... This work of art. You have outdone yourself and I give you my thanks for the privlledge of reading such. -
wow what a great write it has a nice flow to it and there is something about it that i can relate to i dunno it ryms sometimes but most poettry these days dont ryme as much as they used to i dunno i guess its just easyer i think it is anyways
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Sigh... I suppose I'll comment on yours, since it's required and you're the only other entrant. lol. Just kidding. You should know by now I absolutely adore your writing, however highly jealous of it I may be. Hecate... the supreme Goddess, in my opinion. You've done her great justice here, I must say. Written with a very modern feel to it, which my wiccan tendencies can't help but appreciate.
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