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Surface Calm

Surface calm enfolds
the hidden tiger
of repressed emotions
sleeplessly prowling
within the inner reaches
of the mind’s cave.
Surface calm here holds
attention – geiger
counting the ocean motions
of reactivity, radioactivity
tuned into the wave lengths
of the [he]art’s rave.
Surface calm explodes
upon the calm surface
of a sheet which enfolds
the hidden tiger of .....

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  • DizzyLizzy
    April 1, 2005
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    the hidden tger of ME>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA Wine is really kicking in now!


  • MargaretG silver member
    April 1, 2005
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    Well done

    Surface calm is not calm at all, still waters run deep. We are surprised that we have such a tiger in our dark recesses, and it is a temptation to pass off responsibility for the depredations it commits. Recognizing that the tiger is also me is the taming of it. Your poem may have other significance to other readers, that is the beauty of metaphor.
  • Vialokin
    April 1, 2005
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    I just love these lines:

    "the hidden tiger
    of repressed emotions
    sleeplessly prowling
    within the inner reaches
    of the mind’s cave."

    I hadn't thought about the analogy with the tsunami until I read wanda's comment.

  • Night Hope gold member
    April 1, 2005
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    'Surface calm explodes
    upon the calm surface
    of a sheet which enfolds
    the hidden tiger of .....'

    Ah, yes...I know this one well...hehehe There is a volcano raging underneath the calm waves of the ocean...well done, Scribe!!! ♥ Wanda