Sit down, Sit down, Wandering Knight,
Your Queen waits in secret for you in vain.
Make haste, Oh, Wandering Knight,
Your Queen sits lonely in the balcony again.
Break your Oath, Woe betide Knight,
The Queen wishes to heal you from all pain.
Oh, Loitering Knight! Oh, Loitering Knight!
Remember her pale beauty, forsaken by your honor,
Shred our love in pieces, this love is only anguish.
Even before meeting, ruin was spreading her tart ardor
Wooer of disaster, in this Realm, love is a way to punish,
For love is here the most clever and malicious traitor:
A doom to all land, in strife and blood will split and perish.
Tremble now, Tremble now, Forlorn Queen.
Cling to the memories, filling the trail you now follow.
Rush now, Rush now, Forlorn Queen.
Tremble with pain, blazing your face with sorrow.
Do not Despair, Do not despair, Forlorn Queen.
Your Knight rests in the ground struck by an arrow.
Ah, Doomed Queen! Ah, Doomed Queen!
Hurry in swift gallop to match the ill fortune’s march,
Bestow your final love, seeding the sourest tears.
Death looms willful, in her wake all living will perish.
In your arms life fade, facing you his spirit swears
Vowing for a love, that not even Death could finish
Scorching Love, marking your heart with many sears.
Ah, abandoned Queen! Abandoned Queen!
Even in your retire, you still not rest well...
Ah, abandoned Queen! Abandoned Queen!
For the autumn is your only station to dwell...
Ah, abandoned Queen! Abandoned Queen!
But only in the winter’s mists you hear his yell...
Author notes
Another poem, fantasy style. Bit of Keats influence here again. Thank for Shira for revewing it for me.
Written March 31st, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Inspired by Tristan and Isolde by Frodofan.
300 points, ended May 26, 2006, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Awsome!!! Great Job!!!! I really enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work. I am looking forward to reading more from you in the future.
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I think this is really well done. I love how you have used some of the "olden" words, I guess you could say. It really gives that certain tone to the piece.
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Wow, this is a very great poem. This was very cool piece and I like it alot. You tell a story that is very interesting and unique. I really did feel the love that existed here. Good Luck.
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Very nice... My favorite parts of the poem would definately have the be the very first lines. The repitition worked really well in your favor here. Great write.
Best of wishes
Tiffany
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Nice job, thanks for sharing...you like these stories I can tell here..keep up the good works...pen on!
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not normally fond of most "fantasy" writes, but this poem is a definite exception! it's almost to see this being played in front of the reader's eyes and to hear it! you did a very good write in this one Joao, and I really enjoyed the read!
Jo
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I've read the book, a good one.10x for sharing this poem, good writing.
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Just to tell, I tryied to fix the puncctuation problem.
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I do not know, you mean an epic, ballad ? Well, Thanks , it is true, when i am writing poetry I often leave the punctuation in my mind, unlike when I reading prose. And since I am awful reviwer I end letting those things go. I will keep in mind about the novel, thanks.
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Tristan and Iseult- you ought to read the book by that title, by Rosemary Sutcliff I think... it's an excellent novel. Anyway, I like this poem- it's good for a poem that tells a story (blegh, my mind's blank, can't think of the word for that type of poetry...) One suggestion- the ending could use some punctuation to make it feel a bit more complete.
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