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Life in deed

And what might my dreams be for myself?
I want to be that person that don't need
any supplements to get by a day...

I want to see my mind grow. To be able to
Communicate to any that crosses my life
I want to live two seconds faster than the
beat of my heart. I want to be no higher or
lower than anyone...

I want to be able to bend down to help and
stand up when needed.

These are the dreams I seek for me and to feel
my life fulfilled if this has not occurred.

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Written March 31st, 2005

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  • Osarkon
    September 6, 2005
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    Nice theme, but your phrasing threw me off slightly, the language seemed sort of erratic. And 'Indeed' is one word, I love that word, lol! Keep it up ~ Osarkon


  • Thayla
    April 6, 2005
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    Brilliant, just one thing. The second line shouldn't it be doesn't instead of don't. Besides that a wonderful poem. Lovely ideals. I hope you reach those goals!