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for claude (i am a dolphin)

Do not act
as if
you do not
give a shit
about all these
dizzying events
in your world.
As emotions rise up
only to fade back
like waves
dying on every beach,
let them see
even a moment
of that beauty…

Author notes

i wrote this for my bestfriend back when she was having a problem... short, but i love it still
Written September 15th, 2004

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  • momentarylapse
    April 23, 2005
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    gosh sikat si soda!hehe.sad and beautiful piece.i loved it.


  • April 15, 2005
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    Great job. I loved this, but it was short. LOL. I like short though. It's easier to read sometimes. Keep up the good work!!!
    ---Freddy


  • antique
    April 13, 2005
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    i love this one too .. short and sweet, with a beautiful message .. beautifully written and it flowed really well .. keep the ink flowing hun .. I'll definitely be back to read more later .. big hugs

    ~Aimee

  • wbluerose02
    April 1, 2005
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    Awesome Job

    WOWWWWwww I like this alot you have great talent. I so hope to read more of your fine writes,I give this Two Thumbs Up and many more. Thank you so much for sharing this with my family and I. Keep up the amazing job you do.

  • falling tears
    April 1, 2005
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    awesome poem!!! keep writing


  • sodancewithsoda
    March 31, 2005
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    lady anairO, thank you i used a lot more EMOTION to fuel bittersweet, as compared with this.. but i love both! bittersweet, after all, is about my first love whom i refer to as "bittersweet"


  • senza
    March 31, 2005
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    I loved this.
    It was really good...
    I still prefer your first one though!
    But this is still... ahh...
    Beautiful.
    Lady anairO


  • xxRaquelxx
    March 31, 2005
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    Hey tis a cool poem!!! I luv da imagery that u used!!! *dances around wit u* lolz, keep ritin!! XX

  • Insane-Ninja
    March 31, 2005
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    this is the very first poem of yours I read and I must say, I'm tempted to read more of your work now. I like how you convey the images and your choice of words is very nice ^-^ good job


  • Dragon Flame
    March 31, 2005
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    hey dude this is awwwweeeeeeeesome! lol i love it hun, i love ur style, this is wonderful *hugs herself* and some great imagery... nice one well done *claps a million times * rach xxxxxxxxx


  • sodancewithsoda
    March 31, 2005
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    haha, thank you but.. i chose the words carefully, so that it would match my bestfriends sentiments and thoughts "waves dying on every beach" strikes me as THE sad kind of beauty... but, yeah, haha, that's what i think anyway

    s ginger yesh, the animal in the parenthesis is connected to her problem (mukhang malabo pero hindi )

  • gingergreentea
    March 31, 2005
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    I love the brevity of it. I would suggest stronger word choice since you're working with a single image here. A stronger word substitute maybe for "dying" in that line 'waves dying on every beach'. what does that image for you look like? what is its beauty? is it the sad kind of beauty? show us
    I love the title in parentheses by the way.

    Keep writing

    Kannika

  • marrow
    March 30, 2005
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    I echo what xxsunxxkissxx said. This was a great write. You had a drive.. a defying purpose for writing it. You didn't white wash this and cake on the metaphors. It was simple and natural. Nicely done.

    Justin


  • Holly Anne Fairden
    March 30, 2005
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    yay! Great poem Soda! ^_^
    Holly

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