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Would you be surprised?

Sitting in
a bright lecture theatre
Listening to a monologue
about
Queering Femininity
and the Woman in the Red Dress
I look around

I wonder, how many people
Would be surpised
If I put my arm around you
And leaned in and kissed you
On the cheek

Would you?

Author notes

I saw this awesome monologue, at the suggestion of the girl I love, called "The Woman in the Red Dress", by Anna Camilleri. She's a really cool author who writes about the lesbian experience. There were a lot of other lesbians there, but also a lot of people I knew from class (the special presentation was part of their class). And all I wanted to do was put my arms around the girl I love - she doesn't know I love her. I wish she did.

Here's Anna Camilleri's site, for those interested. Her performance was brilliant! http://www.annacamilleri.com/

Also, this piece needs a way better title.
Written March 30th, 2005

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  • LastingEmber
    July 27, 2005
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    i'm gonna check that out, thanks. also... wow deep poem. i can get alot of that.


  • Yourkitty623
    June 6, 2005
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    very good

    wow what a good job doll ... it is soo cute and full of the best emotions *claps* i adored it keep up the good work

    _love_kait(lyn)

  • poetgirl43322
    May 23, 2005
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    you did an amazing job with the piece of art. It has so much emotion and feeling put into it, i can tell as i read it. thank you for the site information, i am so going to check that out. nice work and good luck with the girl, i'm sure everything will work out


  • xSarahx
    March 31, 2005
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    Great piece! It's short but sweet. I think you should tell the girl how you feel, it's better to have her know than to regret never telling her!! Besides, what have you got to lose? But anyways, great job, keep up the awesome work, and give some thought to the title, a name will come to you sooner or later!

    Sarah


  • Deviant Dreamer
    March 31, 2005
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    Thank you for the introduction to Anna Camilleri, I have heard of her before but never read any of her work. I think that I intended to but ended up moving it to the back burner for awhile. This poem is touching. I wish that there were a way to help you, and I wish I had some real advice to give you.

    I have confidence that you will find the way. If you two are as close as I think that you are then perhaps she already has some idea about your feelings. It is very hard to hide the light of love in your eyes, ecspecially when the one you are looking at is the one that holds your heart. I hope that it works out. I hope that you get what you've been waiting so long for.

    On a more critical note, I have to say that I agree about the title though.

    -Shae Lynn-
    Edited on Mar 31, 5:34 p.m. because ''.

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