Breathe
I tell myself
inhale
exhale
breathe…
It never used to take such effort
seemed
natural
easy
breathe…
Now I sit in shadows
wondering why I try
empty dreams
empty arms
no babies crying
no children laughing
and tomorrow
stretches out her barren branches
beckoning me
breathe…
I wonder if I should just forget
how vacuous my womb feels
and how to take
the next breath.
Patricia Gibson-Williams
Author notes
I read the rules. I hope this is what you were looking for. Patti
Written March 29th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Free Verse Fanatics-Come All Free Verse Writers! by BleedSilver.
350 points, ended April 6, 2005, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Actually we are suffering from infertility. I've never been pregnant, but we have been trying for several years. Every cycle it gets harder and harder to hear that we have failed again. Especially since our insurance (like most) doesn't pay for infertility treatments. It's hard to fathom spending $10,000 or more on a cycle of infertility treatment that may or may not work, but it's even harder to imagine life without a child of your own. So far we've only tried the less expensive options, but even they cost between $1,500 and $3,000 for less then a month. Thank you for commenting. Patti
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wow i really liked this. At first I thought you were talking about a mother who's kids have grown up and she's all alone now but I think you were talking about someone who had a miscarriage or an abortion. interesting. Good work! -
This is an insightful and poignant piece. Good job.
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This is wonderful. I cannot describe what this profound piece has done to move me...Great stuff, and good luck in the contest!
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I really like thise poem...it made me think about how the person in the poem must feel...This has worked well and I would love to read more poems like this by you.
Well done. Good luck in the contest -
That's so funny... I tend to write in rhymes and this was one of my few deviations from that. I’m glad that you liked it anyway. Patti
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alco
i love this poem! the spaces were a nice touch. well written, it just flows together off the tip of your tounge.alco -
Blubber to the rules, this is very very good.
The lines all bind the emotions into a pwerful force - by the time it is read the reader is in an emotional tail spin.
I am certainly envious of this writing. -
hmm... This poem makes me think. It's very well done. In just a few words you described so much emotion. That's the point of poetry! Very interesting and compelling.
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this is a nice poem. I tend to prefer rhymes myself, as a general rule, but I feel this has so much rhythm in it without needing to rhyme. It's touching as well and is quite an intriguing read. I enjoyed it, thank you.
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