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sun rays streaking down

sun rays streaking down
dozing off on sandy beach
soothing cold shower

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Written March 29th, 2005

A contest entry

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  • Peas in the Sink
    April 4, 2005
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    Oh man I like getting a tan but if I ever dose off on the beach I will need more than a cold shower.....lol. I am Scotish, so I don't tan I just burn. I like the description used. I makes me feel warm and cool inside. Good luck in the contest!


  • dycz
    March 30, 2005
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    so warm!


    thanks for entering!
    ~dycz [have some coffee]


  • fourth coming
    March 29, 2005
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    GOOD JOB

    good one sounds warm PATTY


  • queen Moderators member
    March 29, 2005
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    Sounds like a plan to me Good luck in the contest