It’s never going to change...
This feeling inside of me...
A heart will stay out of range
And my heart will never be
Felt by another
Or motivated to act
Kept away, it died today
My heart is nothing more than a...
I don’t know how long I can stay
Or keep on living this way
I wonder how long it will be
Before I can see
Someone else like me...
I’ll never get to walk on the beach
With someone held to me within arms reach...
And closer, and closer, and closer
And closer, and closer, and closer
But that will never come...
My path in life is a narrow one...
I walk alone, with no one...
My life is stuck to be this way...
I’m gonna keep living this day...
Forever, and ever, and ever, and ever
And ever, and ever, and ever
And never will I find a heart attuned to mine...
Felt all alone today
Lost all control today
Broke down crying in the street today...
...what a pathetic little man...
...I know not what to do or if I can...
...I guess I’ll stay this way for good...
...my life is... ruined...
Heh...
Well, there is one purpose for me
As long as I continue to be
Then people will see me
And do their best not to end up...
Just like me...
Author notes
Remember folks, these old pieces blow! Heh... seriously, this one makes me cringe actually. Not just the depressing-ness of it all, but the horrible repetition and horrible rhyming scheme. It's like a bad song. Heh but here ya' go.
Oh, and yeah, remember, this is up here like the last one for reference, to show my improvements! It's good to have a point of reference to show off your skills. Others should try that.
Oh, and one other thing. I'm posting that song next. The one that's old but I updated it completely. I like how it turned out finally. Still corny but... well you'll see! -Dan
Written September 10th, 2001
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Too late, we're all like you.
This is what I'd call an oldie, but a goodie. It may be an older, less developed write, but the emotion is there, the flow is there, keep it. Nice write 
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it was good but maybe reduce the repitions a little
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Well, it has a good motto to it - Don;t end up like me. But hey, that is not how you ended up is it! You have moved on - grown, developed............ need I say more.
Diz
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