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I think all is fine

I think all is fine
Until you make me harbor doubt.
Tattered and pulled from inside me
And left out in stirless air
You break my soul into pieces

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Written March 28th, 2005

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  • Xx Alice xX
    September 3, 2005
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    Doubt leads to not trusting, and not trustin leads to heart ache. So I figure if I can't trust a person, they aren't worth.....me. It isn't easy to say that, but in the long run it stops the pain.


  • CarterTachikawa
    March 29, 2005
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    Ah, very cold. An excellent, well-written poem. Those jerks who jerk you around (pun not intended) can turn you very bitter. Well done. Thanks for entering and good luck!

    ~CT