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Saturday Never Came For You And I (Pt. 2)



Saturday Never Came For You and I
(Part II)


Young and fine
15 years your senior
Hell, looking at you alone is a misdemeanor

My friends all thought I’d lost my mind
I’d overhear them calling me "Stella" from time to time

But it’s OK, because we all knew you’d go away
I saw you yesterday, but you didn't see me

She was as young as you, with her little son
As she looked in your eyes she heard
"We’ve only just begun"+

I overheard you promising her Saturday too
But will Saturday come anytime soon for you
Will it come for her? Or will it simply pass her by

Because Saturday never came for you and I

Inga
a/k/a Poetlady777

 

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Written March 28th, 2005

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  • April 12, 2005
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    Good Job

    Ohhhhhhh! Inga, what a sad poem Well, what's really sad is that I'm sure someone has actually experienced this... You did a very good job with writing this poem. Keep that pen moving and take care


  • GOT-XO
    March 31, 2005
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    emotionally fantastic!!!!!!!!<3

    tear tear tear wow this a really emotional p0em!It was emotionally fantastic!!!!!!!!<3


  • TangerinePuddle
    March 28, 2005
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    I enjoyed this piece quite a bit...wonderful rhyme and feeling in this. Bravo, Bravo,bravo,bravo.


  • Poetlady777 gold member
    March 28, 2005
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    Thanks for pointing that out! Regarding the poem, it's fiction for me but one of my friends actually went through this. The lady he was with did not have a son though, but my friend did ( I don't know why I changed it). She doesn't know I'm on the AP so she'll never see this. I just wanted you to know it's not 100% true, but we know it's true to life. Thanks.


  • joliemere
    March 28, 2005
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    Oh. Is this true? I thought it was just written like fiction. I didn't think it was real until reading the second part. One minor thing I noticed was in the 7th line you left out the n in "didn't". That scum bag! There's no telling how many girls were promised a Saturday by him. He needs to be stopped! And the new one has a child too..stunning. That scoundrel! He needs to be taught a lesson. Another beautiful write!

  • broken-inside
    March 28, 2005
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    Wow....real feeling here and amazing use of words to make the rhyme....also the rhyme doesnt feel forced. I loved this write...im going to find part one and also read your other work.Brilliant xxx

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