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Japanese-inspired Lovers

Japanese-inspired Lovers

Creativity
Is elusive just like you
When I beg you stay

Let me stay away.
Let me let you keep your wings
and keep your distance.
Distance will not keep us from
Love profound; We bleed the pain

Author notes

Just so I'd know how it feels again to fill this part:
The title actually is from the forms of the poems: The first one (Creativity...) is an attempt in senryuu, the second, in tanka.
Written March 28th, 2005

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  • Jess-xx
    March 29, 2005
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    lol ooops i meant "rhyme" hehe you only had two lines that rhymes but they stood out to me i dunno im weird ok

  • Jess-xx
    March 29, 2005
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    i liked your rhymes in this poem...god luck and thankyou for entering