Wrap your arms around me
And melt in to my skin.
Let me feel your soul,
Let me feel you.
Here in the wide open
We're the only two alive.
Nothing else does matter here,
You are my everything.
Let me feel you lead the dance,
Sway my body along with yours.
Hold me tight against you,
Till I melt in to you.
I cannot hear the music,
I cannot hear the chatter;
All I hear is your steady breath
And the beating of my heart.
Warm, so warm against me,
I want to feel nothing but you.
Swaying, almost floating,
Together, alone, one.
Author notes
Written March 28th, 2005
In a list
What did you think
Comments
1 - 14 of 14
-
Lovely sentiment. This paints a pleasant picture and was an enjoyable read.
Peace,
~RJ~ -
ok for better
i am at a loss. i liked the first poem of yours but did not see where to leave a comment. clearly, you are very talented. but this last one seems really immediate and arbitrary. it sounds like a song without music. the meaning is clear but unimaginative. in closing, i only leave this comment because i expect there are many more of your works that are wonderful. -
Such words formed to melt one's heart as two hearts melt as one, filled wiht searing passion, so beautifully rendered!
-
How anyone could read through these words and not fall in love would be beyond me. This is exquisitely executed from beginning to end. You have done an awesome job here!
♥ Kimberly -
Thank you! I must admit, my favorites are my love poems. But I always had a thing for the pieces I've wrote that were pure imagination. LOL! I have no experience in this stuff to speak of, but I fake it well. LOL!
-
You are very good at writing love poems. This may just be the type that you are the best at. You paint such a beautiful pure picture of love. I loved this. It was heart warming. Well done sis, Hugs, Penny
-
No the drawing wasn't done by me. It's by a girl who goes by the name Nemesi. She's a wonderful artist.
Thanks for the comments! -
Beautiful, not OTT, fairly simple, but direct and clear. Was going to try and give some sort of critique, but I can't see anything worth criticizing. I think I'll save this somewhere -it's lovely.
Edit: and is the picture yours too? wow... it's a style I really like - wish I could draw like that!
Edited on Mar 28, 1:12 p.m. because ''. -
good job....this was very nice......i luv that kind of luv!!!
BRAVO dear!
Tisha -
That was really nice, i feel warm and fuzzy inside now
You have a talent to write without rhyme with is something authors use to hold the peice together, you dont need to use that and I commend you for it
-
this is gorgeous. one line bothered me though, although the rest were lovely. "you are my everything," although an often true sentiment, is somewhat banal. so maybe revising it would be good.
-
Erin, this write is wonderfully written the form is flawless and also this poem just melted my heart, I love reading love poems, but sometimes people write them to sappy and then that ruins it lol. This write reminds me of something i would read in a romance Novel. You do have a great talent.
Jenn -
Erin, this is so wonderful!!!!! I love when you write love poems; they're so full of imagery and beauty. Marvelous write!! Hugs, Patricia ♥
Adding your comment:
1 - 14 of 14
5 old applause
