I want to be there...
Out there among the trees,
Under the blue sky,
Feeling the wind blow
And the chill air sting.
I want to feel the sun's kiss,
And run through the grass;
Knee deep in swamp muck
Making friends with 'gators.
Everyday now I've envisioned
Running, long and hard,
Straight forward from somewhere
On in to nowhere.
Toss open those doors and leave,
Eyes watching in shock,
As I run off in to the wild.
I could be like the Jersey Devil,
With sightings reported all the time,
Many believing I exist,
The rest thinking they are nuts.
I want to rest in trees,
Legs dangling below,
No cares ever again.
No car payments or credit checks,
No polygraphs or road tests,
No credit cards or checking accounts,
No worries, no more.
Everyday now I've envisioned
Running, long and hard,
Straight forward from somewhere
On in to nowhere.
Toss open those doors and leave,
Eyes watching in shock,
As I run off in to the wild.
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Written March 26th, 2005
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Oh, this is just so cool!! I just love this. This so captures that feeling of longing to be free from all the responsibilities and restrictions. You have done an excellent job with this and it is my favorite by you so far. "I love the Jersey Devil" but I had never once thought of how it would be to "be like the Jersey Devil." LOL Very unique. Great job writing this also. (Can you tell I like your poem?) I really am impressed! Hugs, Penny -
i want to be a jersey devil too! then we could have a brotherhood of the jersey devils and it would rock
no, wait a minute, its five am, what am i doing still awake?
ignore all previous comments
in seriousness, this has to be one of the most original poem ideas ive ever come across
glad i found it
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Aunt Erin, this was wonderful! I loved it! I think that everyone at some point or another wants to run away and just change everything. The ones we should worry about are the ones that don't want to do this; I mean, after a retreat, I want to stay there forever! LOL! Love your background too! It's great!
Keep it up Aunt Erin; you have great potential.
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People just disappear all the time...but I sure hope you don't...cause your wonderful words would go too! I really enjoyed this...great way to put real emotions into beautiful images....Great Write!
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I get the feeling on a regular basis... just riding along in the truck at work, I imagine pushing the door open at a stop and running off in to the woods, leaving parts of my uniform in my wake. LOL! Maybe the only reason I haven't is... well, only my driver can open any of the doors in the truck, but yeah. LOL!
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Oh, I remember this feeling all too well. How nice it would be to leave the world behind, never to be seen again. I nearly did that once. I had my plans all figured out. They would find my car and my purse in the Ohio River, but a body would never be found. That was when I was married to my now ex-husband. It was a fantasy of mine that I almost made real.
This is an excellent write, Erin. It was as if you took me back to a time of so long ago. Great job. Hugs, Patricia
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