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I Dream to Live By Loatian (Quatern)

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by ~Gregg Rowe~

Please take me away to Loatian --
Where life will drift in slow motion,
To forget -- en masse -- ribbons red --
Friends, lovers -- placed in final beds:

Where waves sing musical potions,
Please take me away to Loatian --
No intravenous -- I'll be fed --
'Cause daily, I will take my meds.

My heart on earth has surely bled
And salt tears of love I have shed:
Please take me away to Loatian --
Live law's love -- my new devotion,

And drink my wine and eat my bread:
Achieve goal left, before I am dead --
My dream to live by the ocean,
Please take me away to Loatian.

Author notes

Definitions of Laotian

noun :   a member of a Buddhist people inhabiting the area of the Mekong River in Laos and Thailand and speaking the Lao language; related to the Thais

adjective :   of or relating to Laos or its people

A Quatern is four lines per stanza and each line is 8 syllables each which gives it four feet per line. (Quatern meaning in fours .
Written March 26th, 2005

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  • NavyChina
    January 30, 2006
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    Stunning

    I was amazed with this poem. It expresses so much longing, which is much the way I feel about the Ocean. Excellent write, and keep it up!

    ~Griever

  • ammmy
    June 1, 2005
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    a beautiful expression of one's last longing for the place where they truly feel free and at rest...You expressed this wonderfully with great imagery and great feeling,
    nice write


  • pattyann4500
    June 1, 2005
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    This is beautifully written. A lovely, calmness to it that lulls the reader. Excellent poem. Hugs, Patricia


  • cake
    May 29, 2005
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    I'm glad you explained Loatian for me because I was about to ask. My favourite part was also "where waves sing musical potions". Thank you for entering the contest. cake


  • slender spider
    March 26, 2005
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    blissful

    Beautiful, the rhyming is nice, not forced but crafted.
    Your love of the Ocean is well rendered, I loved the line:
    "Where waves sing musical potions,"
    It is so true, being near the Ocean, listening to the special accoustics of surf and sand really does lull a person into blissful forgetfulness. Your poem evoked that for me. Lovely.

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