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with the breeze

Drifting down like falling leaf
I drift and nod into sleep
and if my breathing in slumber pause
think not of whatever was the cause
instead, think of me just dancing with the breeze
drifting down like a fallen leaf
I drift and nod into sleep
and if my breathing in my sleep should cease
tell them I’m just dancing with the breeze
-29Nov2004-

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Written March 25th, 2005

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  • Vianella
    July 13, 2005
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    flowy, nice

    This was pretty good. It has a great flow and feel to it just like the breeze. Great piece. keep it up


  • April Renee
    April 9, 2005
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    oh frucking a. thats awesome. wow. really powerful with a few lines. great job with writing this. enjoyed. was worth the read.

    Blu


  • boothby
    March 30, 2005
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    Top Notch

    this is a well smart poem. spesh the last 2 lines 'and if my breathing in my sleep should cease
    tell them I’m just dancing with the breeze '


  • Piscean soul
    March 27, 2005
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    That is so smart. very calm poem, filled with hope. I love it very much. Keep up the good work


  • Catressa gold member
    March 26, 2005
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    Oh I needed to read something soothing right now.. In this strange frame of mind Fickle and I think this might have worked. Beautiful piece hon.. Truly.. Catressa

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