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Working In The Age of A Pandemic (Kyrielle)

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by ~Gregg Rowe~

I’ve seen dark streets and eyes red- blue
Meet drug addicts, drunken night brawls
Knew love could be found through a hue
Brick by brick I let my wall fall

I’ve seen needles making tattoos
As paint is applied with a scrawl
And met a prostitute or two
Brick by brick I let my wall fall

Worked places where sex is taboo
My youth is a daily recall
By men looking for a cheap screw
Brick by brick I let my wall fall

I have seen life in a new view
To live my life,  not let it stall
A chronic illness lead me to:
Brick by brick -- I let my wall fall



Author notes

I do not know if I pulled this off or not, but I'm being cynical in the way that everyone thought that HIV was being transmitted.  Tatto parlors and prostitutes have been studied and it is known that the transmission of HIV between these groups of people is almost nil (they have been a FEW documentated cases but not enough for serious alarm, not like in other prevelant groups).  The men are a different story--bi-sexual men who sleep around without telling their wives, male dominance so much that the refusal of wearing condoms is never debated in some homes, and the men that prowl on teenage youth--whether male or female--is devastating news around the world.
Written March 25th, 2005

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  • freedomofthemind
    May 28, 2005
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    You've written here a very powerful piece- with a very powerful, and yes, cynical message! Well done, and thanks for entering my contest!

  • Apurva
    May 14, 2005
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    Fantastic!

    Heavy and powerful, its fantastically done!!!

  • shopaholic1991
    May 13, 2005
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    hey huni

    gr8 poem

    u pulled it off realli well

    it excellent

    i wish i was as gd as u at writing poetry

    Keep up the fab poetry



    God bless

    All my love

    XxsophiexX aka Xxsingle girlxX


  • SuZyCuE
    May 3, 2005
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    Strong Message, excellent write

    This is a very powerful piece, and the message that your write brings with it is heard loud and clear. Hopefully people will read this and actually get the message. Excellent write


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    April 21, 2005
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    Powerful and Cuts to the quick! Love it!

    Brilliant hun! This is very powerfully done. Each line adding strength and the repetition really drove it all home. It was like someone slapping you at the end of the stanza saying "did you hear me...people are being SO ignorant with life" At least that is what I hear reading it. As always your flow is wonderful and the message well thought out and done with a great impact. A damn impressive piece! Smokin!

  • listen
    March 25, 2005
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    yes,i did understand your cynicism.people's ignorance often leads them to believe what they see-stereotypes.gossip and fallicies leave a sometimes irreversible impression in their mind.the combination of past and present in your stanzas is interesting.the repetition of your last line in each stanza is a good emphasis on the devastation that HIV brings.

    brick by brick you can rebuild your wall.
    stacie

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