The full Moon aura-ed in the very misty, dark, night sky
Goodness had finally, pompously kissed it's divine, arse, bye, bye
And the notion that it triumphs over evil, is a complete lie
The living, they are still living and the dead, they never died
Zombies, searching for the fresh, blood, flesh of the living
Arms outstretched and mannequin's wobbles for the ultimate collection, of giving
Eaten alive and screaming by a rancid and very decaying face
When your soul could be flying instead, in very deep and serene , space
What is this propagation of the Voodoo, Haiti, race?
Is it the misunderstanding of the religion of the soul?
That part of you that travels and learns and makes you whole
And the religion of the Mother Earth and it's pact with the Devil
Turned the pins into dolls pivoted on a sapphire bezel
And the belly dancers turned into erotically, funny, silver, occult, medals
Twas a very power full and radiant metal and immortal capture
The dervishes danced into a very trance like rapture
As the teeth drilled into the fresh meat of the exposed, flesh, bone
And Venus herself separated her juices from the sea's foam
As the rancid saliva was flowing around your eaten leg
You should have heeded the fortune telling of the runes of Mystic Meg
Confined now to the coffin, damp earth and cold, tomb
Waiting for the darkness and the full moon's, aura loom
Georges.
Author notes
Written March 25th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Revived Corpse by Silent change.
300 points, ended February 4, 2006, 6 entries
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wowww very dark..great job zombies are my favorite "creatures"..lol beautiful work and good luck!
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GREAT! this is sooo awesome. wonderful write! I wish I still had some applauses left.
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youve got the balance of humour and serious zombie just right, good poem.xxx
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Razor-sharp imagery, slight rhyme scheme, foreboding conclusion, I'm really starting to love the way you write. Your poem has a very steady beat to it, reminding me of a drum beat, or a funeral procession...There was almost a bit of rather cynical humor evident in your words, and I love the way you incorperate greek mythology into you words again. I love the part that goes:
"Is it the misunderstanding of the religion of the soul?
That part of you that travels and learns and makes you whole
And the religion of the Mother Earth and it's pact with the Devil
Turned the pins into dolls pivoted on a sapphire bezel"
I really like the ryhmes in that part. Anyways, another great write.
-Rothanna
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Intersting I think this is the best zombie poem I have read in quite some time good job you have my attention
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this is amazing, and the only one i've gotten about zombies, i can see that you have your style of writing and that rocks!! as i can see from the first few lines...lol.
but anyway, this is kwl, well done.
good luck l8az sky x -
I really like zombies, and you capture their essence well. I like how you added in the mother earth part, but the first few lines are bloody BRILLIANT. I <3 them. Keep on writing!
~dani~ -
excellent
i realy liked iam at aloss as to how to tell u how great it is -
AWSM WRITE! very imaginative and humerous all at the same time cool write man!
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great work that is what i can a great fanticy heheh
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Ohhh! Love this dark and imaginative piece! You are very good with descibing the terror of Zombies! *shiver* Excellent~
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Great!
Awesome job. I liked it alot. Very good. Keep it up. toodles.
~Em -
very good, great imagry and emotion...humorous but still deadly serioud...i love the part
"Goodness had finally, pompously kissed it's divine, arse, bye, bye
And the notion that it triumphs over evil, is a complete lie
The living, they are still living and the dead, they never died"
thats so great! keep writing!
-Emily -
Incredibly vivid. Sharp images I actually like that this one turned my tummy lol. thanks for this.
~Angela
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WOW
Wow, i can only hope to be so good...one day. Continue writing, for in thruth i will continue to read, and mayhaps i will learn something from your works. -
really great
Very nice. It flows, the rhymes are effortless. Great write really enjoyed it. Keep it up -
Zombies rock!
Terry Schiavo is my favorite zombie, let's keep her alive, but dead, I say let's all vote to keep terry a zombie, come on Christians who's with me!? -
VERY GOOD I LIKED IT ALOT VERY GOOD WRITE BYE
ADAM 
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CREEPY YET GOOD; LOVED IT
forgive me in not reading this whole write you have. i loved this write right after reading the first stanza alone!! the imaginary and describtiveness is right on the money!!!! and heres a little insight on this write: in vodoun(voodoo) the belief of zombies are real and im a practioner of vodoun. i thank you for such an awesome write ..... smooches
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Humor, darkness, you can put those two together, and somehow pull it off. That is real talent there, real talent. Great work, I like alot of your work.
-Rock N Roll
-Ash Ash -
I agree with the above commenters! Humor and some real meat in the writing. I like the subtle rhyme and the vivid descriptions. Good choice of background, too! It's a great length and good message!
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it was very good... it made me snicker at some points but in a good way... lol hope thats what you were going for
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very incredably done, but I could not help but laugh at the part of
The full Moon aura-ed in the very misty, dark, night sky
Goodness had finally, pompously kissed it's divine, arse, bye, bye
that just made me giggle. another masterpeice, by the master. well done
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