You know how I am, a gentle boy,
Someone who constantly strives to be good.
But it’s hard when you’re treated like a toy,
Use me once, then burn me like firewood.
I’m always there, a shoulder for you to cry
I listen to you when you need to talk, that is no lie
But if someday, I think, if I were to die
You wouldn’t really care, you’d just say “Byebye”...
...
When you have a bad day,
I’ll call you, we’ll talk
If you’re really upset,
I’ll take you for a walk
And still it seems
Like you don’t care
You act as if
I wasn’t there
...
A lot of things, we’ve yet to do
But you know that I’d do it all for you.
Your boyfriend doesn’t ever try
All he does is make you wanna cry
But you still like him more than me
You’d rather be miserable then happy
You treat me as less than a friend
I ask myself, will this torture end?
...
Perhaps I call, or stop by your house
Or I got us tickets to the latest movie
But you don’t call me back, or you’re not home
‘cause you’re f***ing your boyfriend and screwing over me.
...
I try to show you just how I feel,
And you know my feelings will always be true
But you don’t seem to think that I’m the real deal
You say it, but you leave me alone without you.
But can’t you see? The person that’s me?
How much I love you… it makes me cry...
And everyday you just stab my heart...
And leave me alone again... to die...
...why...
But... I should be used to it
You’re no different from the rest
Everyone treats me like this
They say, “You’re the best!
You’re such a great guy”
But if I am, then why…
Is it you all ignore me…
You just don’t see...
I should be used to it
But I don’t want the pain
I want to love you…
...not be hurt again
...That’s how I feel…
Author notes
As it says above, this is an old piece. I am going to post up another one as soon as I'm sure this one is read. The two poems I am putting up are from when I was about... 15 or 16. When I was still in Newtown actually. So 15. Heh. I don't like the style, but I wanted to show people how much I've improved in my writing from back then, and what kind of mood I was in during those years. I like to think I've tried to go along a happier route, don't you?
Also, A song I wrote back then I'll post as well, but I have changed much of it recently so it sounds more like what I wanted it to be. A reference to my story "DragonBlade". -Dan
Written June 8th, 2001
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very good
Hmm... a lot to think about when you read this poem. Honestly, I wonder the same question everyone else seems to be asking. Did she ever learn? Did she ever wonder?
I loved how this poem (an oldie but goodie) reflected emotions that were probably hidden since you've known this girl. You tried to show her that there is more to life than how many times you can get screwed by your boyfriend, then she ignores any sanity ang goes to him.
The only thing that confused me was the rhyme scheme. It kept changing, which I don't think is a bad thing, it just got confusing as to which direction you wanted to go.
All in all...I applaud this piece.
@-}-- Heather -
Did she ever get the hint??
Yes - the poem has it's childish side - but that is not always a bad thing. I have been posting lots of my older poems recently too. Perhaps a way of wiping the slate clean - or just reliving past times, mistakes, happiness - Who knows. Just keep writing.
Take care - looking forward to more
Diz
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DAN!
i havent talked to you in FOREVERRRR! er.. i love the poem though! great job, if it was from a females point of veiw it would be perfect for me. but anyway.. hope to see you on sometime!
luvs
dani
your apprentice hehe -
I liked this regardless of when it was written...I have a lot of old poems I posted I am not particulary proud of them...but the people on this site who are that age now can still relate...and as long as the feeling was real and honest it's generally good to someone...I'll check out your newer pieces too though....
good job!
Tisha
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