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Nighttime

Moon reflecting on the lake
A wonderful sight to behold
Where I go on on endless nights
To see nature new and old
Fish asnooze in watery beds
Crickets chirping sweet melodies
Woodland creatures closing their eyes
As far as your eyes can see
Nature's peace calms a hectic being
So this is where I'll rest
On the cool damp grass under a beautiful sky
The place I love the best

~March 3rd~

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Written March 24th, 2005

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  • DevilsWrongHand
    April 13, 2005
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    Hey dragon
    Glad you enjoyed this and you put it on your wall...hope all my work will make it there (on your wall) someday.
    XOXO
    ~laura


  • PolarbearOpapatika
    April 13, 2005
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    just so you know, i printed it out and im going to put it on my wall


  • PolarbearOpapatika
    April 13, 2005
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    very creative, you really should try to get your stuff published, i think that would be great,

  • DevilsWrongHand
    April 5, 2005
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    Thank you so much mike. you are so very kind.
    XOXO
    ~laura


  • evo-mx5
    April 5, 2005
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    Quite a beautiful picture you have painted, laura. It would be a perfect place to sit alone or with that someone special..a very romantic setting.

    Excellent piece..I'd applaud it but I'm out of points..

    Mike

  • DevilsWrongHand
    March 24, 2005
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    Thank you for reading natari moon.
    XOXO
    ~laura


  • natari
    March 24, 2005
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    Well done

    A very beautiful poem.Full of vivid imagery.The setting was peaceful and soothing.I thoroughly enjoyed this piece.Well done and thanks for sharing..

  • DevilsWrongHand
    March 24, 2005
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    Thank you for your help dear. LOL
    XOXO
    ~laura

  • DevilsWrongHand
    March 24, 2005
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    Thank you so much dear.
    XOXO
    ~LAURA


  • Shameless1 silver member
    March 24, 2005
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    3rd line reads odd...should it be "where I go on endless nights"?
    4th line how about making it "nature" instead of "nature's"..it would read better...
    5th line...no need for the word "the" at the beginning...IMO
    last line..how about "the" instead of "this"..

    I like the overall feel of the poem its calming and there is defiantly something calm about just enjoying all that the outdoors has to offer in the way of piece and quite.

  • Christopher Hall
    March 24, 2005
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    there isnt but so many ways i can explain greatness,,even though i am reading it with each write you post,,i love reading you stuff and will await on many more in the future,,,asnooze?? ha ha

  • DevilsWrongHand
    March 24, 2005
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    Thank you Briteshadow
    For reading my work. Glad I occupied your time.
    XOXO
    ~laura

  • Briteshadow
    March 24, 2005
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    awww, this is so calming. I love it very much and the bit about the fishies is cute lol, well done and thankyou for sharing

  • DevilsWrongHand
    March 24, 2005
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    Quill
    Well thank you so much for reading my words
    XOXO
    ~laura


  • Quill
    March 24, 2005
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    beautiful words

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