Why is it so cold?
Why is the sky so bleak?
Why does the wind not whistle
But instead makes the branches creak?
Why have I lost all feeling?
Why have I gone so numb?
How in the world is it possible
That I could have been so dumb?
I’ve made mistakes in the past,
That’s something I can’t deny,
But this time it seems so different,
It’s as if I’ve somehow died,
I feel like I’ve lost everything,
And in a sense, I guess I have,
Because I can’t smile, I can barely speak,
And I don’t have the strength to laugh.
My heart still beats, this must be true,
Because I still live and breathe,
But it’s like a knife, so cruel and cold,
Has made my heart its sheath.
I feel this pain, like none before,
It chills my very soul,
I think I’ve truly lost it all,
I can’t even feel whole.
What mattered most, what brought me joy,
Has now been stolen away,
And I wish that somehow, this could be changed,
That she would come back to stay…
Author notes
This is a piece I wrote when my heartache knew no bounds, right after the love of my life took my heart and left me. As my name implies, I was writing to escape the agony, as I often do.
Written March 4th, 2005
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Perfection. Pure and simple!
Hugs and bites, Lady Raven -
good
We all have experienced the pain and I think you expressed it well.The imagery was beautifully done so haunting.
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WOW! this is so beautiful yet so sad.....just so full of emotions with a lovely choice of words....it's got a brilliant flow too....
truly a marvellous write...sad but lovely....n i really liked these lines:
I feel this pain, like none before,
It chills my very soul,
I think I’ve truly lost it all,
I can’t even feel whole.
so,aptly describe heartache!
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I feel like I’ve lost everything,
And in a sense, I guess I have,
Because I can’t smile, I can barely speak,
And I don’t have the strength to laugh.
i read this again Kyle...
I just had to and I have to reply again
i love this poem
the flow
the beat
the heart
and the baring of the soul...
-shivers- it makes me so sad to read it... its just that effective... and true... goodness.
I love you honey
and I'll be there. -
Keep it up
Very nice dewd I share your feelings but on a different level anyway its very nice you can always come up with very nice stuff. Peace out dewd -
Maaahvelous.
'But it’s like a knife, so cruel and cold,
Has made my heart its sheath'
Those are my favorite lines. This is hreatbreaking. I've never felt the hurt of such a painful thing as losing your love, but you made me understand exactly what it's like and dread the moment that it happens to me. You gotta keep the faith, though, kid! EXCEPT you are most likely older than me, so, whatever. ANYWAYS, contrary to what montez says (bless his soul, but he's the one doing the heartbreaking), love is out there for everyone, I think. For every broken heart there is a blossoming love. OHMIGOD that's the deepest thing I've ever said. I'm sorry, you've caught me in an obnoxious mood, but really, this poem was VERY enjoyable, eloquently crafted, rhyming was ace, everything was in place. Great job.
Reesa
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Thanks to everyone who has commented. I think just about everyone knows the pain of this experience, all too well. I'm glad you all know what I was trying to express, this is my way of letting go of pain, I'm sure some of you know how that is. Thanks again for the positive comments, I appreciate it.
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wow i liked this! you described how it feels so well!
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Very well said, I really felt your pain and I've been there. I hope she came back. Also, I loved the scattered rhyme and form. A talented piece.
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Wonderful piece, lovely and heartwrenching. I really identify with this. I have felt this depth of pain once in my life, which is more than enough. You have captured the feelings perfectly with your words. Beautifully written, great job.
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Such Agonizing Beauty
If there was one power I had
One strength I could posess
It would be the talent of truth
The talent to express through my eyes and my mouth
thoughts never given too much credit
for their meanings
their true feelings...
their voice lay beneath doubts and
uncertanty screaming and screaming for someone to listen,
to hear
to see what waves of agony look like when
the hear overflows with blood as it overflows the wrist
I just dont get it.
You just dont get it.
No one will ever--get-- it
Kyle this poem is beautifully written.....painfullybeauutiful of course. Its the type of beauty that makes me want to cry its so isolated. Honey you are beautiful-- you are perfect with or without that girl...she didnt take your heart, just a sizeable chunk... but you will always be who you were... as long as you want it
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