capillaries form
in the softly moonlit clouds
and weave together
merged into the fibrous veins
that reach deep beneath the earth
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just revised this old tanka i encountered while i was digging through old poems looking for revisables.
Written December 26th, 2001
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This is an excellent write. I also like the background you have. It's very chic. So is the poem.
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very good
This one I like very much, it seems very cosmic, saying a lot with a few words. Where else can I find good poetry on this site? I don't want to endlessly read about broken heart poems but am looking for substance. -
Great visual writing. Perfect use of words.
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yipee
i got this one to
softly moonlit clouds....I liked this term
yeah .am crazzzy about winter too
nice picture here
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Yes the trees are very much alive, even in winter. This is an awesome poem. Strange to visualize trees and actually blood with capillaries. :0)
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So many people see a tree in winter, devoid of leaves, and that is all they see...a naked tree. Your poem shows us with vivid imagery, there is so much more below the surface. Hmmmm, I wonder if this could be applied to other things as well?
Cheers,
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You always have such visual backgrounds to go with your works. It shows that you feel your writes. One of the things I enjoy about your works.. Pokes her nose out.. Take Care, Catressa
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