fall, walking alone
a single leaf, floating
on rippling waters
Author notes
Written October 18th, 2002
In a list
A contest entry
- Haiku Contest by misticmoonlite.
675 points, ended September 24, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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beautiful imagery
You have created a very peaceful mood with your well chosen words here in this haiku. Rippling water and the leaf, a wonderful vision for the reader.
Good luck in the contest!
Love ya,
Jeannette
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Very nice, Sis!
"A single leaf, floating
on rippling waters"
Nice image to contemplate!
Good Luck in the contest!
Love Ya!
♥ Maureen
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Wow!!
You are sooooo good at these and I'm still working on my Haikus
Love the images for I can see this leaf in rippling waters
Beautiful picture to see
Thank You for sharing this!!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sis
Hope You are doing well today and everyday
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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though written a while ago
its still as beautiful as the day you wrote it...and you are still beautiful...love the tender thoughts expressed within you...
big hug
from the hunk
Mal
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action haiku's
Don't see too many haiku's with action. Usually they are purely descriptive. Still, I love autumn and I enjoy the feelings this produces. I enjoy walking alone near water. It is especially beautiful in autumn. -
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Oh my sis, simply precious. Such a beautiful haiku. Best of luck in the contest.
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neat poem
the picture of your words say it all,fall leaves turn our creeks into a mirage of colors, thanks for entering And good luck..MM
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Excellent job! This was so beautiful! I love the picture. Pictures help bring the words to life! (Sorry I'm having fun testing out my preffered membership for the week, so don't mind the bold and italics ) Great write, you keep impressing me!
~Kayla
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Excellent
Hi Susan:
This is a beautiful verse which you have enhanced with the picture above. Very, very nice. Thanks. Bill -
another good one
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Lovely read seemed peaceful or could be lonely but very nice read....could even be relaxing:) Sherry
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very nice peaceful -
don't touch it!
Short but very sweet -tj- -
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Susan I love a good Haiku...and a photo haiku is even better. Wonderful photo! I am thinking of becoming a paying member so I can share my photo haiku as well as my drawings. :)
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BEAUTIFUL. Lovely imagery in so few words. Again, the effect of mellow tranquility. -
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truly lovely
beautiful picture!
thanx for sharing -
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That was a sweet poem. I also liked the pic! ;) (Thanks for commenting on my poem btw) You do wonderful worK! -
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Lovely Haiku. Your talent for using just the right words and placing them in just the right sequence shows through. LOVED THIS!!!! ***Ivy Rose -
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Very cool. -
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Susan, this is such a beautiful verse ... and the image is great too. May you feel the restfulness of fall ... and may you be totally healed. Hugs, Myra -
Thanks so much all of you all
and Sis Vicki thanks for the lovely words and the prayer i am touched sniff sniff**
Blessings
Susan~~ -
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Very visual and beautiful as always. Blessings, Daoine -
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Another beauty.....Desiree -
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lovely and purty -
don't touch it!
a single
leaf
floating
on rippling water
the image that popped into my head
was soul food for me sis, such a loiving write from
my sweet sis, now before I go to bed,
Dear Heavenly Father,
You told us to be the light to
the world. And Susan is so sick
Let me be her light, let me be
her strentgh, let me be her
shoulders, legs, arms, mind
and soul.
Let me be the one to
bear her pain. Give
her peace, and rest,
Let her place her
silken head upon
your chest, but don't
let her shed the tears.
Bring the tears to me
to shed for her.
Let her experience
the real art of love.
Let your healing
hand touch her heart, soul and mind.
That she will gain
strength through it all.
Amen
Susan I hope you don't mind. I just felt like dishing out
a heartfelt prayer before I went to bed. Now I am left in tears instead, for my love of you as a sister. -
don't touch it!
:) I agree with Tina, very pretty sis..;) Hugs, ~~~ Ce (Who is not liking autumn this year and it is my favourite season.;o(..) -
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:) really pretty
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