Legs
spread wide
surrender
to the one you
love
Sweet
passion
filling the
small room; moving
slow
Soaked
in sweat
crying out
moving fast for
peak
Pants
soft and
evident
as the lovers
sleep
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Written March 22nd, 2005
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Lanturnes are quite easy to write. It goes by syllables, like a haiku. Each line has a certain amount of syllables. 1, 2, 3, 4, 1 is the way the lantures syllables for each line goes. Thank you for commenting, though I'm not sure what you mean by your last sentence. Do you mean you couldn't get into one of my lists?
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These are very suggestive for so few words. I've already used more just describing them. I liked them. I don't quite understand a lanturn. Thanks for commenting. Tried to enter an erotica an was sent back to your home page.
Andy -
Wow, this is so well written. I really like. The only thing, in the second stanza, line four has the wrong number of syllables. Still it's really good erotica.
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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brilliant
beautiful absolutely beautiful ,,loved it,
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