Dark goddess of the night
Cradled by the hands of death
Destruction is the path I lay
Leaving nothing left
The lost they cry for release
Their screams intoxicate
With a kiss from my supple lips
I soon posses their fate
Every pulse of their veins
Ignite an undeniable lust
The monster unleashes inside
As they turn over their trust
Warmed by the taste of blood
The crimson flows over me
Ingesting life with every drop
Until they cease to be
Never able to fill the the void
Euphoria is fleeting
No chance for redemption
My body always depleting
A goddess of darkness
Cradled by the frigged hands of death
To live is just a dream
The lust is all that's left
Author notes
I really want to know what people think of my writing. Please give me your true opinion I chose option 8 on the pictures to choose from.
A contest entry
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YOu write very bold and fearless
you weave the dark and light most revealingly!
WE can all feel it...the anguish and courage combined.
It pierces through most boldly!
You are a very talented writer!
ears/Seattle
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ok so you went with the vampiric seduction...bery nice, although I would try to reframe from using the word "crimson" it is co0mpletely iover rated...besides that I think that this piece is very good...thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
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Well I guess you are right about the crimson thing. I am gonna change it. It is nice for another person's true opinion. Thanks.
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Thi is very good and dark...Weird to say this cause i normaly don't like long poetry but this felt like it should have been longer...like at the end i wanted more..which is good...thanks for entering and good luck!
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Thanks for taking the time to comment. I appreciate you taking the time. Thanks for the kind words.
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I L-O-V-E this poem. I love how you put 'A goddess of darkness
Cradled by the frigged hands of death' at the beginning and end. It was a great poem.
The lost they cry for release
Their screams intoxicate
With a kiss from my supple lips
I soon posses their fate
But that was my favorite part....sigh....I wish I could make a creative poem like this one...
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