Beautiful
beautiful rain upon my chest,
Beautiful lips upon my neck,
his hand caressing me on my hips
loving every move he makes
touching me in places that make me wet
Soft kisses that I receive.
Loving me tender he never leaves
he touches my legs with compassion and love
only to set my mood above
Keeping me wet he put it in me
Loving every bit I let it be
Beautiful motions he never stops
He always puts me on the top
Beautiful love sets me above
Letting me fly like I'm a dove
Author notes
MCR rules
Written March 21st, 2005
A contest entry
- erotic lust or making love by Blissfullhatred.
800 points, ended August 24, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Beautiful write, congrats on the silver. Well deserved.
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thanx so much
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I f*cking love this. I love love love love love this. (dont be surprised if you win)
Billy's Baby
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thanx so much im glad you enjoyed it
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You know this getting very hard for me becuz him and i both read these and when we look at each other afterwards the passion sparks like a cigarette to a puddle of gasoline.
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dude thats alsoem it makes me happy to know that my poem speaks to someone i just love that fact and if it could help you with the romance that kick ass caues i like poems that do that for me im so glad that i can help you guys
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Beautifully penned
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thanx for the comment
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a wonderful write and i usually dont prefer this stuff because they go into to much detail but this is good it is sensual rather than sexual and i prefer sensual to the latter anyways great poem and good luck with this contest
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thanx for the comment
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this is quite lovely, it's romantic but erotic I love.
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thank you
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I really liked this. It showed a lot of emotion and it was intense. I wish you good luck on the contest. It was great. Keep up the good work.
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thank you so much for another chanch I hope you like the way I made my changes ans im so glad you loved my poem I cant thank you enouf sam thank you
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LIKE IT
I do like this alot. There are many things I like but one of my rules is to capitalize "I" and you didnt put MCR rules in the authors comments. Since I like it so much if you edit it befor the contest ends then I will not exclude you fron the contest. I love this is is so nice this is what I am looking for though. I hope you edit it befor the contest end but I love it.
Sam
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I like how your a so deep. Not just in this poem but in all of your poems. i hope to see more
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