Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

A Memo To Anyone Inbetween

I just want you to know that love, care, and devotion-
Are all separate things.
To care about someone is to be affectionate towards them-
To have a sense of well being for someone other than yourself.
    To be devoted to someone is simple-
pure, unadulterated, unwavering trust and respect that is both given-
              -and received.  
    [Come on now- am I getting warm?]
Love is love-
    to be consumed by such a wonder as love-
Is the greatest happiness to grace our lives as we know it.
                           [Accept it for what it is, and how it comes.]
I just want you to know that to care, to be devoted, and to love-
               -are three separate things.
I also want you to be aware that behind every smile there's a cry-
    And behind every truth there's a bold faced lie.
When you acknowledge that hiding behind a facade won't get you anywhere-
    I'll let you know I'm staying right here, so there's no need.

He's so different from you- hiding behind his
Angles and Theories,
Beliefs and All-knowings
Of caring, love, and devotion.
    He's so honest that I'm scared he'll be hurt-
         And that I won't be able to do anything about it.
    [Prevent it- help him- relate to him.]
                    [I don't know you- but I know him]
To say that I care- or love- or am devoted to him-  
    Is an understatement.
I just wish I knew how-
To help him.
I just want you to know that to love, and to care, and to be devoted-
    Are three separate issues-
And that every time I kiss you-



                                                      I see his face.


Author notes

IF YOU VIEW IT- CRITIQUE IT!!!! PLEASE!!!


Trying something new for a writing class- feel free to give open critisism- It needs it!
Written March 21st, 2005

What did you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 6 of 6

  • leaving-normal
    May 12, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    powerful, very powerful. Your poetry has a very lyrical quality to it, that I absolutely love, I wish I could have that confident sense, and wit in my poetry. Im again impressed.

  • Okuto
    April 19, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    seems I'm late, but the poem is good, I enjoy reading things of the such. I like hearing the other sides of love as love isn't all happy happy, some people are blind and are too caught up in the fantasy to realize the grim and paradox realitlies of it all. But off of that, very emotional and powerful poem

  • biff pedachenko
    April 18, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    Well done. I'm not usually a fan of end rhymes but you certainly made it work. Content is great and well expressed - made me think - and I guess that's the real test.

  • Broken-xDreams
    March 22, 2005
    Edit | Reply

    eeek

    eek I love this poem- so oh so true and you do a great way of writing your emotions always!!
    "I also want you to be aware that behind every smile there's a cry-
    And behind every truth there's a bold faced lie." Oh so true and why do we always try to hide it? eck great job...Love You!!!


  • Applesauce
    March 21, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    I'm so confused ... i like the poem, and the hint of repetition. I like the meaning but the ending is a refrence to personal image, and thats where me being your friend gets me lost ... owell either way i liked the poem a lot much love !

    ~*)()(baby girl)()(*~


  • facelessxfacade
    March 21, 2005
    Edit | Reply

    True

    I really like this. It's so true- they are all different things and sometimes people don't realize that...I love the way you set it up... You lost me with the whole other person that you saw- I'm assuming it was the person behind the facade? Eitehrway- I really like it and thought it was great... I hope you don't mind if I bookmark it...

1 - 6 of 6