with ribbons and bows
she struggles to be normal
only to be laughed at...
only to be mocked...
her abnormal ties mark her out
differences are too clear...
but she's not stupid,
and her features are right...
So she prays to God
and the angels descend...
they take the blades away from her wrists,
golden hugs made just for her
brightens her eyes and lifts her laugh...
They talk about life
talk about dreams
they talk about her new wings
then softly they leave her room
creeping gracefully up the cloud of stairs
leaving just her body lying there....
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Written March 21st, 2005
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I like it.
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this is very beautiful. so much emotion was put into the poem. i can understand this girl with the ribbons and bows. great work =)
jess -
very nice. its much better w/ an ending.
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Wow. That was amazing. It took my breath away. I loved how you ended it, and it was just so emotional. I could feel the hurt and the ridicule along with the character in this sad story....Great job!!! -
thank you for your comment I have changed it since you've last look. would you do me a favor and look it over again and tell me what you think of the ending.
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wow. so short yet it states so many things that we all understand. it's pretyt pretty sad sad sad. i understnad it. good write. it does seem a bit uncomplete though. but none the less, i enjoyed it =D
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i agree its not done. i do like the imagery you have going in the beginning. its very differerent and paints a picture. i would go with that. describe her appearance or something. the way its going is kind of cliche and blah, but it has great potential. don't let it slip away.
~Kendra~
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