Good morning little sister
you were on my mind today
As I stood behind the window
and I watched the snowflakes play
They seemed to stir a memory
of a winter long ago
Where I saw two children playing
building snowmen out of snow
How we laughed together toiling
though the snow was falling still
When you whispered, Ben I'm tired
and I felt a little chill
Devoid of boots and hat and coats
we nestled by the fire
Did I feel a little shiver
as we watched the flames burn higher
It was quarter after seven
when we heard our mother say
Hang your stockings on the mantle
for tomorrows Christmas day
Daddy came upstairs to kiss us
as he tucked us both up tight
I heard you little sister
when you whispered Ben goodnight
It was early Christmas morn
when daddy came into my bed
As he wrapped his arms around me,
he was crying as he said
Little Emma won't be with us,
he was gripping me so tight
She was wanted up in heaven
the angels came for her last night
It's been five years since it happened
and I thought you ought to know
That I thought of you this morning
as I watched the dancing snow
And I know he never says it
but our daddy feels the same
For last night he talked to mummy
and I heard him speak your name
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Is there Christmas up in heaven?
as there is on earth below
Do the angels celebrate it?
little sister, does it snow?
Does Santa come to see you?
are there gifts beneath the tree?
Do you have chicken for your dinner?
Is there Christmas cake for tea?
Are you happy up in heaven?
do the children all have wings?
Are there slides and swings and roundabouts?
and other childish things
Are you older little sister?
or is your age the same?
Are our Gran and Grand-dad with you?
Do you ever speak my name?
Good morning little sister
you were on my mind today
As I stood behind the window
and I watched the snowflakes play
Author notes
This is purely from my imagination and has no link to reality in any way, Just an idea that came to me on snowy day
Written March 21st, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- TEN THOUSAND POINTS OF RHYME (Now 20,000+) Part 8 Sad/Nostalgia by cricketjeff.
1500 points, ended January 24, 2008, 51 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Oh, this made me tear up. You do have a way of attacking the reader's emotions with your well penned poetry. This is amazing and felt so real. I am happy to know it is not a reality of your life. This is such a beautiful sad poem that shows a great compassion for a lost sister.
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Oh...what a sad read Legend....thank goodness it is not your sadness that inspired this write albeit someones else's. though it was sometime ago now I congratulate your win....indeed you are a master...
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glad it's not from life
Oh dear I'm going to have to go check out some of your humorous poems now before I get seriously sad. It might not be your reality but no doubt some place some time it was true for somebody.
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Boy, you sure know how to bring a tear to ones eye, don't you. I don't know, but i seem to recall another poem very similar to this which had the same effect. This was just so moving, so full of emotion and love that was showered on his little sister. I love how you told this story so simply as if at times you were speaking as an adult and sometimes as a youngster. There is not much i can say about this other thatn it is perfect in every way. Thank you so much for sharing this wonderful piece. Oh, and congrats on the silver trophy. Although an oldie, it still rings with perfection.
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If I had not read your author notes and seen it was from your imagination I would have believed it was a true story. This was beautifully written with such loving yet sad sentiment.
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wow, this was just so beautiful and so sad.
There are just no words...
Congrats on the silver trophy it was well deserved!
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Heartbreakingly beautiful
When i saw the title I thought of a girl I went out with named Emma.. She was a poetess on this site for a while..
In any case as I read this sad tale I recalled my daughter who passed away .. You know, parents should not outlive their children! There should be a law..
http://allpoetry.com/poem/325606
This poem gives a little hint of our lives.
Now i need to go read something cheery..
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Wow! This is an awesome read! I loved the way the story just flowed and pulled me in. It was very believable.
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Congratulations from both Jeff and I on your well deserved win of the silver trophy.
I have to say that the first time I read this through I was crying long before the end and even now I still get a lump in my throat.
It is a very beautiful and heart wrenching poem and fits into the catagory perfectly.
We have both thoroughly enjoyed reading all your work in this series of contests and look forward to reading more from you in the remaining contests.
Well done
Sue and Jeff
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Congrats on the win...very high standard here-guess I'll have to work harder! xxx
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congratulations
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And a beautiful idea it was, Legend! Congrats on the trophy! I'm relieved to learn this isn't a personal experience write even though the tears are heating my eyes this a.m. Beautiful poem from a soul that knows no bounds. Goodness! Best to you on the journey.--Kel :
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A blizzard of emotion
This is quite the most engaging thing I've ever read. When one forgets about the poetry and become simply absorbed in the unfolding of the lines you know you are reading something very special. Perfection. I salute your incredible ability with all my respect. This is one fantastic piece of emotion, sad, touching, and hauntingly beautiful.
My congratulations.
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This is of your very best. The saddest best poem in the contest. With a little attention to the scan and some sentences this would be a contender for the best sad poem on AP. Enormous thanks for entering it.
Thank-you very much for your continued support in the series. When we started running these it was hard to find rhymers on AP who would admit their guilty secrets, now many of the best "Free-Versers" are entering!
On a more personal level I know that this series has improved my own poetry enormously and that Sue feels the same. We have also met a great many poets we did not know existed several of whom I now class as friends. Thank-you very much for this entry.
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What can i say The trip for me has so far been a wonderful experience.I would really like to put right the things that this poem fell on.
I fear i will never be able to do so, mainly because i write how i feel and what I know
Sadly my knowledge (lack of schooling My fault) of the finer points of poetry are scant.
Scan mean nothing to me( again my ignorance)
I feel I should do something about it but have the fear also that it may take away the gut feelings i have for poetry, and I will get caught up in what i consider the obsession of getting the form right.
I have never counted syllables or such things if it sounds right in my head thats it.
Though clearly it is not.
I have found no challenge to your selections of the winners in every round.As they have by far been the best pieces
Oh well maybe next one
I feel honoured to have gained the silver in what has been some excellent opposition. My thanks to you both for your support And congratulations to all the other winners
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Excellent
As usual you have done a cracking job.You pulled out all the stops and stepped up the emotion level.Well donr to you and very good luck in the competiton.I feel that you will do well, Ros
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Simply outsyanding!! Will have to add this to my many favorites of yours. I'm simply at a loss of anything of worth to say here but that I loved this write
Ruth
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you made me cry. Brilliant.xx E
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So moving and beautiful. I think we never forget even when we stop asking questions.
Nice write.
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Words of praise just couldn't match the words in this wonderful poem. I wish you success wherever this piece is placed.
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What a fantastic write - and why you are on my favorites as well. This is a fantastic story/poem/write from a fertile imagination. Well done! Enjoyed reading immensely.
Paul
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Oh legend, as usual you have gone above and beyond the call of duty! lol This is a fabulous piece full of imagery that I can see as plain as day! One of my favs to date in fact and that's not easy to say because you write everything so well! This looks like gold to me! I wish you the very best in the contest,
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Deer Legend, I have read this poem many times and apart from that child with his pike and bike it's one on my favourites, and no matter how many times I read it, it still brings a lump to my throat. Good luck in the contest with this very touching write.
Shaz xx
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This is so incredible. I am glad it was made up, for it really touched me. Great writing. Very impressive. Good luck in our contest. Jeannie and James
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Thank you Jeanie and James So pleased that you found this one worthy of reading and commenting on.I do like sad poetry, to read that is not always to write I think it can be so powerful reading
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Heart stopping
OOh I would say this is sad but in a touching way,
Love how you can stir the emotion within us with this write, as always your pen runs deep.
Warm thoughts
Frozentearz
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Thank you Tearz this one was written some time ago and one of those Of mine that I quite like.So I am pleased that you enjoyed it Thank you for taking time to read and comment
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very sad but great poem write.
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Thank you so much slayer for taking time to read and comment I really do appreciate it Thank you
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Thank you Baker it is so nice to know that ones work can have such an effect on someone.I have to say that when I had finished writing it, and read it back to myself for the first time I too had a strange feeling.Even though i know it was only a poem from my imagination.It is one of mine that i do so like to read over now and again Thank you for giving me the opportunity to do so.And thank you so much for your comments
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I am crying.
This poem is so amazing. It is so well written and it reminds me of a lifetime movie. Wow. This...is...just...amazing. I am so shocked at how emotionally i took it though. Its very very very good and you deserve any award for poetry, any applaud, everything...because this poem and all your poems are just so good.<3 -
Thank you so much Shaz for you wonderful comment,I am sad that it made you feel that way but happy in the knowledge that the poem seemed to work,Strangely it was one of those poems that once the first line was down seemed to write itself.I too got quite emotional when I read what the final outcome was.This pleased me as i thought,it could do the same for the readers Thank you so much for your comments they mean such a lot
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Dear legend
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Wow, this blew me away and crylol.. you brat, I read futher and saw it was made up.. but it was indeed a sad but loving piece,I have to admit, you were convincing .. thank you for letting this be unreal to your life.. Linda
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Dear Pam you really are going to have to stop all this crying,its bad for your computer to get wet,I do not want to be the cause of you getting a shock.Oh thank you for your wonderful comments.Who knows how a poem comes it just wanders around looking for a pen And as i keep one handy it visits me.
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This piece simply melted my heart and soul
I have got to be out of my mind to click on one of your sad poems, but I must admit, I don't see the subject until I'm well into it.
It could have been a Minnesota morning when my brother and I were young. Oh this just HURT. So precious and beautiful, and I am CERTAIN they serve Christmas Cake and Tea in Heaven.
.....there I go....
How do you do it? I just cannot begin to know. ~Pam
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My thanks to you HoPeFuL its not my intention to bring tears to your eyes, but is it has moved you so, then as a poet i believe i have achieved that which i set out to do, Get the reader involved. Thank you
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WHOA!
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Thank you saddie, its strange how sad poems can have such an impact on the reader, I love all the old Victorian type poems that make a big deal about death, they always get to me Thanks for your comments
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This trully a beautiful poem. It made me cry for you, because I thought this was real until I read the authors. Saddie23
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Thank you Linda for your comments, Its strange how one can get an idea for a poem and then it takes over, and it almost seems as if it is real,that happened here,I never realized it until one comment I had mentioned something about hoping i was getting over the lost. So i had to put in the authors note , it was not factual
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My thanks to you kanashimi for your comments,I wrote it and felt like crying myself at the time,I started with just the idea and it wrote itself after the opening lines
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I am certainly glad that this isn't a true story, as I was feeling really bad as I read it! Best of luck in this contest!
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Linda
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wow... it's so sad, i almost cried! it's a good thing it isn't real, though!
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Wow, that was wow. It surprised me how heart-felt this was considering it didn't happen. When I was reading it I was like "oh my god, that must have been terrible" and then I read your authors comments and I felt better. It's amazing how much emotion went into this even thought it was created in your imagination. Very good job! I loved it.
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Hi janice thanks for your comment , thankfully this was a product of my imagination.as you know i am in the middle of running a postal vote contest and am up to my eyes in reading all that comes in , so forgive me if it take a while to return the favour, be sure that i will
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Excellent
What an amazing emotional poem. Is it true???
Thats so sad.
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Oh my goodness... this is REALLY good. You absolutely brought out my emotions and I like the idea of the "dancing snow". Just so you know, I thought you meant "are" not "is" for the line about grandparents. Good luck in the contest, Keep on writing, ~TC
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