I've lived in this world for so long
Done so many things that grieved You
And I don't want this anymore
You reveal to me my leprous heart
And I encourage the disease
And I don't want this anymore
You tell me to run from my sin
And I place myself where I could fall instead
And I don't want this anymore
You give me freedom from my chains
And I run back to my imprisonment
And I don't want this anymore
This is how I've lived for so long
And I want to know how You made me
Not want this life anymore
Author notes
This is my first poem I've posted here.... it's how I see myself now in my relationship with God.
Written March 21st, 2005
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I think this is a great poem. It is great because it can be percieved in a few different ways and readers always like to identify with the piece. It had a good rythym. I enjoyed it!
Kasdaye -
Sincerely Brilliant.
Wow... first off, I'd like to welcome you to the site, *offers handshake?* and secondly, just amazing poem you have here. It put such an unexpecting twist on cliche religion, and turned it around into your own world-view, which may indeed differ from person to person, but held strong in such a sense. I liked the repetative *I don't want this anymore* It brought so much emotion within ever couple of lines... it gave, and gave. And though it was repetative, I truly think this added, as oppose to detracted from the poetic effect. I see here, that perhaps you once had an intimate spiritual relationship, and something's occured, and now it's dwindling? Just a stab in the dark. Whatever the meaning be, this was great. I found it very pure and well thought out. Very thought-provoking. I will surely read more from you in the future. Nicely done!
Cheers, and then some.
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