Beware, they aren't here yet,
egalitarian oldbodies
decidedly mossy,
not particularly rolling like stones anymore.
Every aging couple the same-
together reclined in web browsing bliss
touring the digital realms
in the future king-sized beds of tomorrow,
no real reason to get up for anything,
going everywhere, influencing everything.
Is this the future?
Simple sitting in bed?
Tumbling madly through the unmeasurable
hyperspaces of Internet worlds and
ending our days in a reclined digital rigor mortis?
Fated to exist without actually seeing or touching,
uttering words not heard
though received nevertheless?
Unless new technology yet to be invented
rises up and displaces laptops and wireless,
endless geriatric lives will be spent on the Internet in bed!
Author notes
........................I've always wanted to write something
about this new phenomenon, and here is the chance!
This is an acrostic poem- 'Bednetting is the future'
Written March 20th, 2005
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A contest entry
- When I Grow Old by Sherlock Holmes.
300 points, ended April 6, 2005, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Wow what an awesome poem and image to go with it! I was creeping through the archives to find examples of acrostic poems my newest learning experience. Funny yet not funny, witty and so thought provoking on many different levels...thank you
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So this means what... we are all destined to have safe sex, net sex?? Hmmm... I guess that will work for some people. No more complaining of headaches, now it will be no tonight dear, my floppy drive won't work?
Or some other techno quip! One minor error, I think. Second stanza, second line..."Simple sitting in bed?" Seems like simple should read, simply You are cracking me up here. Go to bed and put the laptop A-W-A-A-A-Y. Good luck in the contest!
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Wow, I really enjoyed this. Seems like this contest is getting harder to judge by the minute. So many good ones - but this certainly got my attention as it was very well thought out and presented. Thanks for entering.
Sherlock
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I hate to click without leaving a comment. This is certainly a sad outlook for the human race if it were to come to pass.
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I found this to be amusing but a bit disturbing in the truth it speaks of. Human contact is becoming extinct, not only for the geriatrics, but for almost all of man kind. As everything is so accessible on the net. The words that hit me the hardest however were
"uttering words not heard
though received nevertheless?"
For some true bonds can be made through words typed that would not otherwise be spoken...Excellent as always. -
Cool. I didn't even notice the acrostic aspects at first - I was too busy wondering if you'd made a typo and meant that bedwetting is the future, but I understand what you mean after I re-booted my brain, and found this to be a very amusing poem.
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Well written and food for thought. Pretty interesting concept that will be on my mind for some time to come.
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Very interesting. I've worked with these patients and know what you are referring to here. Great job! but....
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Wow, Internet in bed. Nifty. @.@ Interesting write, good luck in the contest!
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Actually, I must confess that this is me. Except I sometimes move to the couch. I'm not a 24-7 bed-netter, but in a little house with an irritating mother, my bedroom's the safest place.
You don't know how much more I like this poem. It's great. You've got imagery, politics, humor, flow (and form). This actually says poetry. The first stanza was a blast. I loved reading it. Wonderful job with this one.
-K
Edited on Mar 21, 2:59 p.m. because 'of a typo'. -
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Wow. That's a scary thoughtt. How boring would life be if you spent it in bed? Computer or no? You did a great job with this poem! It really makes you think about where technology might lead the human race...Great job and good luck in the contest!! -
Wow! I didn't even realize it's an acrostic which means you did an amazing job..I literally said 'wow' out loud and it does take a lot for me to really get into a write. I love the background and image..you always find the perfect ones to go with your write. Amazing! Absolutely amazing.
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